Talk:Cyclone Susan

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  • " The disturbance was declared a tropical cyclone later that day but was not named as Susan until the next day as it was intensifying into a category 2 tropical cyclone on the Australian Scale." to "The disturbance was declared a tropical cyclone later that day, but was not named Susan until the next day, when it intensified into a category 2 tropical cyclone on the Australian Scale." YE Pacific Hurricane 00:55, 15 December 2013 (UTC)[reply]
  • "At this stage as the cyclone was moving towards the southwest it posed a severe threat to Vanuatu however, during that day Susan recurved towards the southeast and subsequently spared Vanuatu a direct hit" semicolon before "however" and comma after "southwest". Also, what is a "direct hit". YE Pacific Hurricane 00:55, 15 December 2013 (UTC)[reply]
  • "After sparing Vanuatu a direct hit," You just mentioned it spared Vanuatu of a direct hit!! Change it to something like "Thereafter". YE Pacific Hurricane 00:55, 15 December 2013 (UTC)[reply]
  • " while starting to weaken significantly passed close enough to Fiji during January 7 and 8 to cause gale force winds in Fiji's southern and western islands." "significantly" passed close to Fiji? wha? Change it to " while starting to weaken significantly, Cyclone Susan passed close enough to Fiji during January 7 and 8 to cause gale force winds along the southern and western islands of Fiji." YE Pacific Hurricane 00:55, 15 December 2013 (UTC)[reply]
  • "While continuing to move towards the southeast, Susan started to interact with Severe Tropical Cyclone Ron during January 8 before it absorbed Ron by 0600 UTC the next day and starting to transition into an extratropical cyclone." Find another sentence to put the "and starting to transition into an extratropical cyclone" line in; this sentence is too long as it is. YE Pacific Hurricane 00:55, 15 December 2013 (UTC)[reply]

MH[edit]

  • "After 0000 UTC on January 2, the disturbance started to rapidly develop further, in an area of weak vertical windshear while it was located near the Fijian dependency of Rotuma.[3][5]" to "After 0000 UTC on January 2, the disturbance started to rapidly develop further due to weak vertical wind shear while it was located near Rotuma.[3][5]". YE Pacific Hurricane 00:55, 15 December 2013 (UTC)[reply]
  • "Later that day, RSMC Nadi reported that the disturbance had intensified into a category one tropical cyclone on the Australian tropical cyclone intensity scale, however they did not name the cyclone; Susan, until 0400 UTC on January 3.[4][6]" Change the comma to a semicolon before "however", and add a comma after "however". Also, change the semicolon before "Susan" to a comma. YE Pacific Hurricane 00:55, 15 December 2013 (UTC)[reply]
  • " Early on January 3, the USM's Joint Typhoon Warning Center (JTWC) designated the cyclone as Tropical Cyclone 11P after it had become equivalent to a tropical storm with 1-minute wind speeds of 65 km/h (40 mph).[7] " what's the "USM's" form and what's the need for it? YE Pacific Hurricane 00:55, 15 December 2013 (UTC)[reply]
  • "developed an eye feature.[2][9]" link "eye feature" to eye. YE Pacific Hurricane 00:55, 15 December 2013 (UTC)[reply]
  • "As the subtropical ridge of high pressure " link to subtropical ridge or ridge (meteorology) somewhere in here, your call which one. YE Pacific Hurricane 00:55, 15 December 2013 (UTC)[reply]
  • "before reporting 6 hours later that Susan had reached its peak 10-minute sustained wind speeds of 145 mph (225 km/h) and a peak pressure of 900 hPa (26.58 inHg).[11]" "speeds" to "speed". YE Pacific Hurricane 00:55, 15 December 2013 (UTC)[reply]
  • "Around this time RSMC Nadi reported that the system might of developed a double eye feature while the JTWC reported that Susan had peaked with 1-minute wind speeds of 260 km/h (160 mph) equivalent to a weak category five hurricane on the SSHS.[2][10]" "double eye feature" Assuming you mean eyewall replacement cycle, link to that. Also, your missing a comma after "Nadi" and a comma after "(160 mph)". Also, you don't say what ""SSHS" stands for. YE Pacific Hurricane 00:55, 15 December 2013 (UTC)[reply]
  • "As the system reached its peak intensity, Susan was moving towards the southwest and as a result, it "posed a severe threat to Vanuatu," however during that afternoon, Susan recurved towards the southeast "just in time to spare Vanuatu, a direct hit.”[1]". Semicolon before "however" and place a comma after that. YE Pacific Hurricane 00:55, 15 December 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Vanuatu[edit]

  • "Because of the upcoming cyclone Vanuatu's national radio extended its programming to run throughout the night of January 5–6, while Vanuatu's domestic airline Vanair closed its airfields in the northern islands and cancelled all of its flights except for several direct flights between Santo Island and Port Vila the capital city of Vanuatu.[17] " comma before "the capital city of Vanuatu". YE Pacific Hurricane 00:55, 15 December 2013 (UTC)[reply]
  • "However during the afternoon of January 7, Susan recurved towards the southeast and the Fijian islands "just in time to spare Vanuatu, a direct hit.[1] " removed this. Wanna know why? You kinda mention this in the MH. YE Pacific Hurricane 00:55, 15 December 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Fiji[edit]

  • "Late on January 6, RSMC Nadi issued a tropical cyclone alert for Fiji" what's that? YE Pacific Hurricane 00:55, 15 December 2013 (UTC)[reply]
  • "On January 7 and 8, Susan passed close enough to Fiji, to cause some minor coastal damage to several southern and western Fijian islands, including on the main island of Viti Levu.[3] " axe the comma before "to cause" or change "to cause" to "causing". The choice is yours. YE Pacific Hurricane 00:55, 15 December 2013 (UTC)[reply]

External Links[edit]

  • "A "fly-thru" of Cyclone Susan - created by the US NASA's Tropical Rainfall Measuring Mission" Very Good find; however; spell out "NASA" and why is there a need for the "US"? 00:55, 15 December 2013 (UTC)
    • Not sure its worth spelling out NASA since its a very common abbreviation - ive removed the US.Jason Rees (talk) 16:07, 15 December 2013 (UTC)[reply]

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