Talk:D. J. Wilson/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: MWright96 (talk · contribs) 09:10, 14 November 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Will review. MWright96 (talk) 09:10, 14 November 2017 (UTC)[reply]

It is reasonably well written.
a (prose): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
It is factually accurate and verifiable.
a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):
It is broad in its coverage.
a (major aspects): b (focused):
It follows the neutral point of view policy.
Fair representation without bias:
It is stable.
No edit wars, etc.:
It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
Overall:
Pass/Fail:

General

Any numbers between one and nine should be spelt out in words per [[[MOS:NUMERAL]] apart from dates and percentages etc.

2015-16 season

"Although Wilson appeared in 26 games for the 2015–16 Wolverines," - Although Wilson appeared in 26 games for the Wolverines in the 2015-16 season,
- I don't agree with this suggestion.--TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 17:18, 17 November 2017 (UTC)[reply]
"Yet, he finished second on the team in blocked shots with 10," - changed "yet" to Nevertheless,
- fixed.--TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 01:08, 17 November 2017 (UTC)[reply]

2016-17 season

"helping Michigan reach the sweet sixteen round," - If it is officially called "sweet sixteen" then capitalise it; otherwise it isn't encyclopedic language, and needs changing.
- Fixed.--TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 00:34, 17 November 2017 (UTC)[reply]
"His 203 rebounds were the most by a Wolverine since Mitch McGary 4 years earlier and his 57 blocks were the most by a Wolverine in nine seasons (Ekpe Udoh)." - don't try and repeat the world "Wolverine" in one sentence
- Fixed.--TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 02:03, 17 November 2017 (UTC)[reply]
"which gives them until May 24 " - which gave them until May 24
- Fixed.--TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 02:03, 17 November 2017 (UTC)[reply]
"relegating him to participation in physical measurements and interviews." - relegating him to taking part in physical measurements and interviews
- Thanks.--TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 02:06, 17 November 2017 (UTC)[reply]
"Declaring early enables him to seek advice from the NBA Undergraduate Advisory Committee by the April 14 application deadline, participate in workouts with NBA teams beginning April 25 and makes him eligible for an invitation to the May 9 — 14 NBA Draft Combine.," - Declaring early allowed him to seek advice from the NBA Undergraduate Advisory Committee by the April 14 application deadline, participate in workouts with NBA teams beginning April 25 and this made him eligible for an invitation to the May 9 — 14 NBA Draft Combine.
- O.K.--TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 02:26, 17 November 2017 (UTC)[reply]

2017-18 season

"Wilson posted his first rebound on October 29 against the Atlanta Hawks and his first four points on October 31 against the Oklahoma City Thunder." - slightly reword this sentence to Wilson posted his first rebound on October 29 against the Atlanta Hawks and his first four points against Okalahoma City Thunder two days later.
- Done.--TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 17:20, 17 November 2017 (UTC)[reply]
" but accumulated no stats." - please clarify this for non-basketball readers
- I hope this is O.K.--TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 17:35, 17 November 2017 (UTC)[reply]
  - Yes it is. Much more easier to understand. MWright96 (talk) 19:05, 17 November 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Going to hold this review until the reviewer has responded to the queries raised above. MWright96 (talk) 20:41, 14 November 2017 (UTC)[reply]

@TonyTheTiger: Since all the points raised above have been addressed, I can now promote this to GA. MWright96 (talk) 19:05, 17 November 2017 (UTC)[reply]