Talk:Dan Deacon: U.S.A./GA1

GA Review[edit]

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Reviewer: Bentvfan54321 (talk · contribs) 03:02, 8 February 2015 (UTC)[reply]

I'll take this one and hopefully will have some initial comments soon. --Bentvfan54321 (talk) 03:02, 8 February 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Should Dan Deacon be linked in the image caption?
- It would seem redundant since he's already linked in both the lead and the first section. 23W
  - Did it anyway. 23W 03:48, 8 February 2015 (UTC)[reply]
"Director and editor Dave Hughes had previously collaborated with Dan Deacon in 2008 for his song "Okie Dokie" from the album Spiderman of the Rings." Remove "Dan" per WP:SURNAME, as Deacon is already mentioned and linked in the body of the article.
- Done. 23W
"However, he felt that, given the tracks' length..." Perhaps it's just me, but I'm not a fan of the words I or he followed by "feel". I'd change it to "However, given the tracks' length, he argued," or something similar.
- Changed. 23W
No dab links, all links are working fine.

As the article is well written with only a few small issues, I'll place this on hold for now.

- @Bentvfan54321: Thanks for your review! I think I've done all your corrections. 23W

@23W: Thanks for your quick response! Also, if you are looking for something to review, my current FAC, 2006 UAW-Ford 500, still needs another review asap. Of course, don't worry about it if you are occupied, but if you could look at it, that would be fantastic. Thanks, --Bentvfan54321 (talk) 03:53, 8 February 2015 (UTC)[reply]

@Bentvfan54321: You're welcome. I'll see into the article; last week was hectic, but this next one might be better. 23W 04:11, 8 February 2015 (UTC)[reply]