Talk:Dave (Lost)/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Lord Roem (talk) 03:55, 1 March 2011 (UTC)

I look forward to reviewing this article :) Regards, Lord Roem (talk) 03:55, 1 March 2011 (UTC)

Maybe wikilink 'fan theory' or put a cite to that? I think it qualifies for a lead cite. Lord Roem (talk) 04:03, 1 March 2011 (UTC)

"Fan theory" doesn't exist as an article, but you suggest any alternatives?

Nah, its fine.

Review

Lead

• What is 'realtime'?
  • Other articles use it, but rewritten.
• What way where they filmed? A bit unclear.
  • Rewritten, see if it's good enough.

Flashback

• "the room: Libby". Change the sentence to exclude that colon.
  • Done.

On the island

• Wikilink comatose
  • Done.
• "calls the hatch a 'joke': he says..." this colon also seems out of place - rework the sentence as well to make it more clear.
  • Rewritten.
• Wikilink 108 to a past episode?
  • Removed.
• "Locke, however, replies angrily that Henry is lying." - why does he say that?
  • He doesn't believe and replies to that with "You're lying.". Thinks it needs a rewrite?
    • It just seems a bit sudden. If there is no context/understandable reason from this episode, its fine.

Production

• Put the info on the final scene with Libby in the mental ward into the plot section.
  • Sorry? The plot section is only for in-universe events, why put production stuff into it?
    • Oh sorry. I got myself confused. :-/.
• "Director Bender...in a way audiences would first believe him to be real..." - add an in-line cite here.
  • The first two sentences are covered by the same ref, but added a duplicate just in case.
• Some of this last paragraph is a bit extraneous. For example, change "Weather problems...waves...rain" and remove the specific examples which aren't relevant.
  • Removed detail on what is from each day of shooting in the cliff, needs more?

Reception

• Ryan j. Budke - is his middle initial really lower case?
• Why did the LAT say it was misunderstood? Add a sentence or two on that.

Final Thoughts

• Good article, even if a bit bland, but certainly viable for promotion. Best regards, Lord Roem (talk) 18:17, 1 March 2011 (UTC)
  • Preliminary Decision: On Hold

Done the requests, awaiting for further input. igordebraga ≠ 03:00, 3 March 2011 (UTC)

I think all my issues are resolved. I'll move to promote! Best regards, Lord Roem (talk) 03:17, 3 March 2011 (UTC)