Talk:David Mirvish Gallery/GA2

GA Review

Unsuccessful. asilvering (talk) 03:05, 29 July 2024 (UTC)[reply]

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Nominator: Zanimum (talk · contribs) 23:38, 22 July 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Reviewer: asilvering (talk · contribs) 02:31, 29 July 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Hi, I'll be reviewing this one. I'll do minor edits myself right in the article, but please feel free to revert or question any of them. I'll leave any less minor questions below, signed for your convenience in replying. -- asilvering (talk) 02:35, 29 July 2024 (UTC)[reply]

First read

I rearranged the lead a bit for clarity's sake, which meant pulling the opening and closing dates into a new sentence, which I've marked with a CN tag for now. -- asilvering (talk) 03:05, 29 July 2024 (UTC)[reply]
But I'm already a bit alarmed - 2012 was more than ten years ago. Is this article up to date? Why does the lead stop here? So I skipped down to the end and find that it's still talking about the "planned sale". It's far more than planned - there's a whole nearly complete condo tower there now! This needs updating. I don't see a single reference from this decade. It looks like you wrote this ten years ago and haven't been back since? What's going on here? -- asilvering (talk) 03:05, 29 July 2024 (UTC)[reply]
Back up to the top of the History section. It's not clear to me why this paragraph on the parking lot is in here. -- asilvering (talk) 03:05, 29 July 2024 (UTC)[reply]
The prose in the Operation section is disjointed - it's often not clear why one sentence is next to another. -- asilvering (talk) 03:05, 29 July 2024 (UTC)[reply]
Not clear what Waddington Gallery has to do with anything either. Klonaridis's gallery also seems out of scope for this article. -- asilvering (talk) 03:05, 29 July 2024 (UTC)[reply]
The section "Mirvish Collection" doesn't appear to have a definition anywhere in here. Is it just "all the art David Mirvish personally owned"? -- asilvering (talk) 03:05, 29 July 2024 (UTC)[reply]
The Mirvish+Gehry section is out of date. There's a wikipedia article on it now: Mirvish+Gehry. -- asilvering (talk) 03:05, 29 July 2024 (UTC)[reply]
As noted above, the planned sale section is out of date. -- asilvering (talk) 03:05, 29 July 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Quickfailing

Sorry, this all adds up to a quickfail, as the article appears to be a long way from being complete, let alone fulfilling the GA criteria. The sections that talk about future plans need to be reworked with current information. The rest of the article needs another pass to remove less-relevant material (or expand it, so its relevance is clear), and to bring these unconnected ideas together into a coherent narrative. There are a lot of open questions in this article that I think you ought to try to answer while you're at it. For example, the lead says the gallery is "run by" David Mirvish, but the body speaks of a director (not Mirvish) and an operator (also not Mirvish). It seems likely that there's more that can be written about the building itself and Mirvish's collection - there's actually very little about the art itself here at all.

Good luck with the article! I hope you can improve it and resubmit it soon. -- asilvering (talk) 03:05, 29 July 2024 (UTC)[reply]

The discussion above is closed. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page. No further edits should be made to this discussion.