Talk:Demons (Star Trek: Enterprise)/GA2
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Reviewer: Viriditas (talk · contribs) 01:02, 1 August 2013 (UTC)
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Lead[edit]
- and directed by Star Trek: The Next Generation alumnus LeVar Burton
- While there they discover a plot involving a xenophobic human organisation
- Peter Weller guest starred as John Frederick Paxton, having previously appeared in Coto's Odyssey 5.
- The critical response to the episode was mostly positive.
Plot[edit]
- Captain Jonathan Archer (Scott Bakula) meets with Samuels, who is concerned that news of the child will stir anti-alien sentiment. Lt. Malcolm Reed (Dominic Keating) is ordered by Archer to meet with his Section 31 contact, Harris (Eric Pierpoint). He is informed that Khori was a member of the Terra Prime movement.
- On Earth, Samuels agrees to get the case file on Khouri for Archer, after he reveals that he knows that Samuels was formerly a member of Terra Prime.
- That doesn't work. This sentence is trying to say that Archer reveals that he knows Samuels was once a member of Terra Prime, but the way it is written, it sounds like Samuels knows this about himself. Please rewrite this by reversing the order. Archer reveals he knows Samuels was a member of Terra Prime in his youth, convincing Samuels to hand over the case file on Kohuri. Or something along those lines. Viriditas (talk) 09:20, 3 August 2013 (UTC)
- Meanwhile on the ship, Ensign Travis Mayweather (Anthony Montgomery) gives a tour of the Enterprise to reporter Gannet Brooks (Johanna Watts), whom he was formerly in a relationship with.
- On the Moon, Paxton is watching a video...
- After he leaves, Paxton injects himself in his neck.
- Phlox discovered that the hair has traces of a substance used in a mining facility on the Moon.
- The ship flies to Mars, where it takes control of the verteron array, which is used to deflect comets from Earth.
- He fires a warning shot from the array back at the Moon and issues his demand for all non-humans to leave the Sol System."
Production[edit]
- The title of the episode was explained by writer Manny Coto as referring "to our own personal demons".
- Read the source a bit closer. He's not really talking about the title itself as much as he talking about the meaning of the episode that uses that title.[1] Yes, the title is "Demons", but the demons are the demons of intolerance within humanity as exemplified by the episode. So it's more like, "Writer Manny Coto explains that the "demons" in the episode refers to the demons of intolerance that humanity must defeat before they can form the United Federation of Planets." Or something along those lines. Viriditas (talk) 03:29, 5 August 2013 (UTC)
- Changed pretty much to what you've suggested - I just added that Coto was also the showrunner for the series (at least during that season) as I also mention it in the lead. Miyagawa (talk) 08:57, 5 August 2013 (UTC)
- Read the source a bit closer. He's not really talking about the title itself as much as he talking about the meaning of the episode that uses that title.[1] Yes, the title is "Demons", but the demons are the demons of intolerance within humanity as exemplified by the episode. So it's more like, "Writer Manny Coto explains that the "demons" in the episode refers to the demons of intolerance that humanity must defeat before they can form the United Federation of Planets." Or something along those lines. Viriditas (talk) 03:29, 5 August 2013 (UTC)
- He said that the two-parter was to show that the final hurdle that humanity must pass before they can form the Federation, which their own intolerance of other races.
- Huh? Viriditas (talk) 09:54, 1 August 2013 (UTC)
- That should have had an "is" following the comma. (Added now) Miyagawa (talk) 17:47, 2 August 2013 (UTC)
- Thanks for trying, but could you rewrite the entire sentence for clarity? It currently reads very poorly. Here is a copy of the current version: "He said that the two-parter was to show that the final hurdle that humanity must pass before they can form the Federation, which is their own intolerance of other races." That makes for a torturous read! And I assume, you do not want to torture our readers! :) Viriditas (talk) 05:56, 3 August 2013 (UTC)
- That should have had an "is" following the comma. (Added now) Miyagawa (talk) 17:47, 2 August 2013 (UTC)
- Huh? Viriditas (talk) 09:54, 1 August 2013 (UTC)
- Colonel Philip Green (the leading villain of World War III)
- The actual link to WWIII here should be World War III (Star Trek), and the text should be made clear that this refers to the Star Trek universe. Like this: "the leading villain of World War III in the Star Trek universe". Viriditas (talk) 03:34, 5 August 2013 (UTC)
Reception and home media release[edit]
- Jay Garmon, whilst compiling a list of the best episodes of Enterprise for TechRepublic, listed "Demons" and "Terra Prime" as the third best. He thought that Peter Weller "stole the show", and that it created a "solid conclusion" to the show despite the following episode, "These Are the Voyages...".'
- I removed the period that appeared after this three dot ellipsis which is also part of a title name. Because the title of the cited episode uses three dots, I seem to recall my English teacher saying 1) don't use double punctuation when the title already has punctuation (for example, if it includes a question mark or exclamation), and 2) don't follow an ellipsis used at the end of a sentence with a final period. It's possible that my chosen style is at odds with some other style, which is why I've made a note of it here. Viriditas (talk) 09:45, 1 August 2013 (UTC)
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