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Reviewer: WikiOriginal-9 (talk · contribs) 20:01, 24 November 2017 (UTC)[reply]

GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)
  1. It is reasonably well written.
    a (prose, spelling, and grammar): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
  2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.
    a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR): d (copyvio and plagiarism):
  3. It is broad in its coverage.
    a (major aspects): b (focused):
  4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.
    Fair representation without bias:
  5. It is stable.
    No edit wars, etc.:
  6. It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
    a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
  7. Overall:
    Pass/Fail:

Lead/Infobox[edit]

  • Link "two-way contract"
  • Shouldn't it say "the Miami Heat"
  • Perhaps link "college basketball"
  • Perhaps change "In high school, he was a 2013 Parade All-American, the 2013 Michigan Boys Basketball Gatorade Player of the Year and the runner up in the 2013 Mr. Basketball of Michigan as a senior at Chandler Park Academy" to "His senior year of high school at Chandler Park Academy in 2013, he was a Parade All-American, the Michigan Boys Basketball Gatorade Player of the Year and the runner-up for the Mr. Basketball of Michigan award"
  • Change "which won the 2013–14 Big Ten Conference regular-season championship outright" to "which won the Big Ten Conference regular-season championship outright" since 2013-14 is already established earlier in the sentence. Also, unlink "2013–14 Big Ten Conference" since it is linked earlier in the sentence.
    • O.K.--TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 19:17, 29 November 2017 (UTC)[reply]
      • "Big Ten Conference" is linked to "2013–14 Big Ten Conference men's basketball season" in the sentence "won the Big Ten Conference regular-season championship outright". Just wondering if you left it in intentionally. The 2013-14 article is linked earlier in the sentence. WikiOriginal-9 (talk) 22:41, 29 November 2017 (UTC)[reply]
  • Change "third team" to "third-team"
  • Add "an" before "honorable mention selection"
  • Change "second team" to "second-team"
  • "with 1,000-points, 500-rebounds and 400-assists" Not sure the dashes are necessary
  • Change "single game" in infobox to "single-game"
  • In the infobox, his all-state honors are listed but not written out in the article. (All-State 1st team (AP - Class B & Detroit News) (2013), All-State 1st team - Class B (AP, Detroit Free Press & Detroit News) (2012), All-State 1st team - Class B (AP) (2011) If they're in the infobox, they should probably be somewhere else in the article too. They also need sources.

Early life[edit]

  • Link "Detroit, Michigan" and "Chandler Park Academy"
  • Not sure we should be using "got". Perhaps change the wording to "Walton Sr. became the head coach" or something else
  • "June 13, 2011 was the first day that Michigan offered" Link Michigan since this is the first team it is mentioned
  • "class of 2013 according to" Comma after 2013?
  • Perhaps change "Walton jumped in the Rivals.com ranking from 57th to 44th" to "Walton's Rivals.com ranking increased from 57th to 44th"
  • "jumped in the Rivals.com" Unlink rivals.com since it is linked a few sentences earlier.
  • "At Chandler Park Academy, he was 2013 Mr. Basketball of Michigan runner up by a 2,130–2,086 margin to Iowa State signee Monte Morris but had one more 1st place vote." Unlink Chandler Park Academy, change to "he was the runner-up for the 2013 Mr. Basketball of Michigan award by a 2,130–2,086 margin to Iowa State signee Monte Morris but had one more 1st place vote", link "Iowa State". Also, should we change "1st" to "first-place"
  • "He was a 2013 Parade All-American honoree and the Michigan Boys Basketball Gatorade Player of the Year." The infobox says it was a first-team selection, that should probably be noted here. Also "Michigan Gatorade Player of the Year" is linked in the infobox. Perhaps it should be linked here too.
  • In the recruiting table, since "Chandler Park Academy" is linked again, maybe Detroit should be too.

College[edit]

Freshman[edit]

  • "played 6 freshman" to "played six freshmen"
  • "season against Morris' Iowa State Cyclones" I see "Iowa State Cyclones" is linked here. If you link it in the early life like I noted above, then maybe you should remove it here. But if you keep the link, then maybe you should link Morris again.
  • In the middle picture "DeAndre Mattieu" should be "DeAndre Mathieu"
  • "but it was Iowa State who won the contest" could be written as "but Iowa State won the contest"
  • "AP Poll #7/Coaches Poll" Link these polls since it is the first time they are mentioned
  • "Walton posted 7 assists for the first time on November 29 against" change 7 to seven
  • "giving Michigan its first 5-game win streak" to "five-game"
  • "Walton set a new career high" to "career-high"
  • "any team has won three consecutive games all of which were against top 10 opponents" to "any team had won three consecutive games, all of which were against top 10 opponents" Also, "top ten" is written earlier in the sentence and "top 10" is written later. We should be consistent
  • "which is the best since" to "which was the best since"
  • "Walton went 9-for-10 from the free throw line including" Comma after "line"
  • "On February 11, Walton posted his first double-double with 13 points and 10 rebounds against Ohio State helping Michigan win at Ohio State for the first time in 11 years." Link double-double and put a comma before helping
  • "advanced to the elite eight round" Link elite eight
  • "posted a career-high 4 steals" to "four steals"

Sophomore[edit]

  • "along with Big Ten point guards" Link point guards
  • "December 9, Walton set a career high with 4 steals" career-high
    • Nevermind. WikiOriginal-9 (talk) 04:27, 4 December 2017 (UTC)[reply]
      • If you can make me understand how this specific instance is an application of what you mention below, that will help me out a great deal.-TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 03:57, 8 December 2017 (UTC)[reply]
        • My comment below doesn't relate to this instance. The "career highs" is fine as you explained above. I guess that 4 could be written out as four though. Thanks. WikiOriginal-9 (talk) 04:15, 8 December 2017 (UTC)[reply]
  • "On December 22, Walton posted a career high of 9 assists" career-high
  • "three point shots" to "three-point shots" Also link "three-point"
  • "The 10 points included two three pointers" change to "The 10 points included 2 three-pointers"
    • People keep telling me to revise per MOS:NUMERAL. This is the opposite. I don't understand the suggestion.--TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 22:19, 6 December 2017 (UTC)[reply]
      • The reasong for this specific one is "Adjacent quantities not comparable should usually be in different formats: twelve 90-minute volumes or 12 ninety-minute volumes, not 12 90-minute volumes or twelve ninety-minute volumes." (from MOS:NUMNOTES) Yeah, the number guidelines are kind of confusing sometimes. It also says "Comparable quantities should be all spelled out or all in figures, even if one of the numbers would normally be written differently: five cats and thirty-two dogs, or 5 cats and 32 dogs, not five cats and 32 dogs" However, I've seen some people change something like "13 points and 3 rebounds" to "13 points and three rebounds". I guess it might be debatable whether or not those quantities are comparable. WikiOriginal-9 (talk) 00:32, 7 December 2017 (UTC)[reply]
  • "On January 24, Walton scored a team-high 17 and hit a 3-pointer" Add "points" after 17. Also, "3-pointer" was written as "three pointers" in the previous sentence, so we should be consistent.
  • "(AP #6/Coaches #5)" Unlink both since they are linked earlier
  • "On January 27 Walton was sidelined as Michigan defeated Nebraska, which began extended time out of the lineup. Walton missed the January 27 game against Nebraska and the final 12 games of the season due to a toe injury." Perhaps change to "On January 27, Walton was removed from the lineup prior to the game due to a sore toe as Michigan defeated Nebraska. He then missed the final 12 games of the season due to the toe injury"
  • The picture with the caption "Walton's season was cut short in January." has a period at the end of the sentence but the other picture with a full sentence ("When Walton and Caris LeVert ...") doesn't. I'm not sure if the caption needs to be a grammatical sentence for there to be a period but there should be consistency with the periods.

Junior[edit]

Senior[edit]

Professional career[edit]

References[edit]

  • Links 11, 15 and 118 don't work.

Done now. If you disagree with anything, feel free to say. Some of these things may be open to interpretation. WikiOriginal-9 (talk) 01:24, 25 November 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Other comments[edit]

  • Another user also just changed his current team to the Heat. WikiOriginal-9 (talk) 21:56, 21 December 2017 (UTC)[reply]
  • "By late December, Walton had used half of his allotment of NBA days while the Heat roster was enduring 6 concurrent injuries" The source says he has used 22 of 45 days, so that's not exactly half. Also, if he stays on the roster for a few more games, then this phrase is going to need to be updated to say "more than half" or something.
    • The source from the 19th says 22 of 45 possible days. He played in the game on the 20th so we know he was on the roster at least another day and I see no source claiming he has been sent back down yet, so it is a near certainty that he will be on the roster tomorrow the 22nd and 23rd. They are on a homestand of games 22nd, 23rd, 26th, and 29th. I would not be surprised if he soon exhausts his days given the Heat injury situation. That aside, the 20th takes us over half and he is likely to continue to be on the active roster for the Heat in the near future.--TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 05:26, 22 December 2017 (UTC)[reply]
  • TonyTheTiger WikiOriginal-9 Hi everyone! What is the status of this review? It looks like no progress has been made in nearly a month.--Dom497 (talk) 03:03, 21 January 2018 (UTC)[reply]
    • WikiOriginal-9 Notifying again since I didn't use the correct syntax the first time.--Dom497 (talk) 03:04, 21 January 2018 (UTC)[reply]
      • It's done for the most part. I'll do another check to see if everything is good. WikiOriginal-9 (talk) 03:44, 21 January 2018 (UTC)[reply]
  • The article has been passed. Congratulations, @TonyTheTiger:! Also, I removed the "first team" from the Parade All-American highlight in the infobox since I couldn't find a source for it. If you think that edit is wrong, feel free to undo it or discuss. WikiOriginal-9 (talk) 03:28, 2 February 2018 (UTC)[reply]
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