Talk:Digital divide in Myanmar

Lead section

The digital divide in Myanmar deals with the gap between economic classes and their access to technological advances. It goes farther than just the technological need, it’s divided by gender and economic well-being. Those who are exponentially wealthier have access to current technologies given them the advantage over the remainder of the population who lacks funds. With the rich and powerful having access while the poor can not afford the luxury, and men having more opportunities to get involved in the tele-infrastructure business. The tele-infrastructure in Myanmar is relatively weak compared to those in surrounding countries. The internet supply doesn't meet the increasing demand; hence the digital divide. TonyLMurray (talk) 03:15, 9 October 2017 (UTC)

Group Comments

  First of all, good job on beginning your work on your lead and citations list. However, at this point in the class you should have a working outline. This will make it much easier on you as you begin your drafting process. I would also recommend that each person puts their name by the section they are working on, as this will make it easier to see who is doing what. I am including a link to the Digital Divide in South Africa page. This is an excellent example of about how much you should be writing for each section, though obviously your sections will likely not be identical to the South African ones. [Divide in South Africa]
  Remember, if you need any extra help come to mine or Dr. Benoit's office hours. Again, good job on beginning your lead and citations list. 

Mmaggi9 (talk) 17:31, 11 October 2017 (UTC) Melanie Maggio: TA for LIS 2000

Group Comments for the Draft

With your current lead, you will want to summarize what the digital divide is and some of the issues through it. Please make sure that you are focusing on all of the issues, as economic issues are not the only reason there is a digital divide. You will also need to expand your outline, as it will only make it easier as you finish your first draft this week. Make sure you are focusing on all of the issues that surround the digital divide, and do not become biased to any singular issue. I also like the links you have posted, but make sure you are posting all of your citations as you move forward. Please contact Dr. Benoit or I if you have any questions.

Mmaggi9 (talk) 03:18, 17 October 2017 (UTC) Melanie Maggio: TA for LIS 2000

Additional comments

I moved your lead to the sandbox, but you still all need to create the rest of your draft sections. Eabenoit (talk) 15:45, 23 October 2017 (UTC)eabenoit

Landix's Peer Review

The lead is a good overall and explains what the article is about. I think that the article could be explained better with less general thoughts of what a digital divide is and more of the details on about it in Myanmar. This article does have topics that were mentioned in lecture throughout it. It flows almost perfectly. There is no trouble of transitioning sections or confusing information. The structure of the first and second sentences in the Economic Digital Divide section are a prime example of how well this article flows. There are both directly related to one another. The Internet Demographics section could have been worded a little better. Some sentences aren't complete. The last sentence under the General Digital Divide section, take out however. It makes the reader believe there is more information to come. I would like to see more information on how and what technological and economical advances are going to be helpful for the people of Myanmar. Who exactly are the internet users? What are their ages? Answering those questions would help strengthen your article. I can tell there was no bias opinions throughout this article.

Overall, the article was well written. It covers all the required subjects and has various credible sources of information. The tone of the article was very formal and professional and had minimal grammatical errors. Nonetheless, good work! If you include who specifically who is using the internet and other mobile devices, it will be an even better article. Good job! — Preceding unsigned comment added by Lalcorn23 (talk • contribs) 00:32, 6 November 2017 (UTC) 3

Amy Fontenot Response: I appreciate your feedback and I have added another sentence after the one that began with "however" because it did suggest that I had more information to give. I have also added references for my information to Gender Divide to add credibility to the article. I have also scanned it for any grammatical errors to make the section more readable.

Moved to draftspace

Hi Afont89, Shelbykatelyn95, TonyLMurray, I received a notice that the page was placed up for deletion. The rationale was "Content fork of Demographics of Myanmar and other articles listed at Outline_of_Myanmar#Economy_and_infrastructure_of_Myanmar".

I have to share in their concern that it's too similar, as the article does have some issues. The first is that the article does seem to have a lot of general information, so it makes it harder to really show that it's specifically about the digital divide and that it can stand alone from the main demographic article. You may want to work on expanding the information in the article or perhaps look into making this into a single subsection in one of the two pages mentioned above. The article could also use more sourcing, as there isn't much sourcing in the article and what is in there isn't really the strongest sourcing out there. For example, this is a self-published source and as such, wouldn't be seen as a reliable source on Wikipedia unless you can show where it's routinely seen as a reliable source by other reliable sources, preferably academic sources. This is also a little suspect, as they describe themselves as "an independent research and consultancy company, focusing on the telecommunications market and its role within the digital economy. We specialise in high-level strategic and statistical research and provide consultancy services to international agencies, governments and businesses." They also sell their reports. This may not necessarily make them automatically unusable, but it is something to be careful about, as they may alter their reports to appeal to a specific buyer or to an organization/area they're surveying. I wouldn't really recommend using this, as we can't really verify their editorial oversight or things along those lines. Shalor (Wiki Ed) (talk) 16:00, 13 November 2017 (UTC)

• It looks like there's an article on Internet in Myanmar, so it would most likely be best to merge this content into that article, since it does have information in there about the digital divide to a certain degree. Shalor (Wiki Ed) (talk) 14:23, 14 November 2017 (UTC)