Talk:Diplobune/GA1

GA Review

Passed. Wolverine XI ^{(talk to me)} 13:38, 23 March 2024 (UTC)[reply]

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Nominator: PrimalMustelid (talk · contribs)

Reviewer: Wolverine XI (talk · contribs) 06:48, 19 March 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Comments

Will get to this later today. Wolverine XI ^{(talk to me)} 06:48, 19 March 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Looks like you'll be around for reviewing anoplotheriid articles, eh? Well, hope you'll be around for Dacrytherium's review sometime, heh. On a serious note, thanks for reviewing this. PrimalMustelid (talk) 08:50, 20 March 2024 (UTC)[reply]

No, I'll only be around to review this article. I'm a busy man with things to do. Wolverine XI ^{(talk to me)} 15:21, 20 March 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Reviewing now. Wolverine XI ^{(talk to me)} 08:05, 23 March 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Review

For the first sentence, remove endemic western European, then start a new sentence It lived from the late Eocene...
- Separated into different sentences. PrimalMustelid (talk) 12:01, 23 March 2024 (UTC)[reply]
erected? Funny choice of words
- Perhaps, but it's a standard term for creating a taxon. PrimalMustelid (talk) 12:01, 23 March 2024 (UTC)[reply]
because he thought that it was Wrong choice of words, please rephrase
- Changed to "based on his hypothesis of the taxon being..." PrimalMustelid (talk) 12:01, 23 March 2024 (UTC)[reply]
promoted to genus Promoted?
- Changed to "elevated." PrimalMustelid (talk) 12:01, 23 March 2024 (UTC)[reply]
there are today today => currently
- Implemented. PrimalMustelid (talk) 12:01, 23 March 2024 (UTC)[reply]
Diplobune was an evolutionarily derived medium to large-sized anoplotheriid with shared similarities to the sister taxon Anoplotherium, the differences Semicolon
- Done. PrimalMustelid (talk) 12:01, 23 March 2024 (UTC)[reply]
hint towards a life => suggests a life
- Done. PrimalMustelid (talk) 12:01, 23 March 2024 (UTC)[reply]
for the purpose of climbing them => for climbing
- Changed. PrimalMustelid (talk) 12:01, 23 March 2024 (UTC)[reply]
He noticed that the inner mounds of the molars of a species Of a species doesn't make sense here.
- Changed to "of the studied species." PrimalMustelid (talk) 12:01, 23 March 2024 (UTC)[reply]
that he felt We don't care what he felt. Rephrase this please.
- Changed to "Because of the molar morphologies being similar to those of..." PrimalMustelid (talk) 12:01, 23 March 2024 (UTC)[reply]
For the section "skull", if you don't have an image of Diplobune, please don't show skulls of other groups.
- Removed, not the biggest fan though since the skull of Anoplotherium is similar enough and none of the Diplobune skull images are available for CC licensing/public domain. PrimalMustelid (talk) 12:01, 23 March 2024 (UTC)[reply]
Slightly shorten the sections on "skull", "limbs" and "brain"
- Cut down on some less important details in the three subsections. The "limbs" section is long still, but I believe the information I left for morphologies and articulation are important for the "no analogue" component of Diplobune and the arboreal hypothesis stemming from its anatomy. PrimalMustelid (talk) 12:01, 23 March 2024 (UTC)[reply]
Please remove the image of Anoplotherium in "Late Eocene"
- I don't think it's much problematic since readers may prefer having a contemporary fauna image being displayed. PrimalMustelid (talk) 12:01, 23 March 2024 (UTC)[reply]
References look typical for a Paleontology article

OK, PrimalMustelid; I am done. Wolverine XI ^{(talk to me)} 08:43, 23 March 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Implemented most of your suggestions. PrimalMustelid (talk) 12:01, 23 March 2024 (UTC)[reply]

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