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July 15, 2013Good article nomineeListed
July 19, 2013Peer reviewReviewed
August 3, 2013Featured article candidatePromoted
Did You Know A fact from this article appeared on Wikipedia's Main Page in the "Did you know?" column on July 5, 2013.
The text of the entry was: Did you know ... that a review for Djaoeh Dimata called Ratna Asmara an "unprecedented tragedienne"?
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GA Review

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This review is transcluded from Talk:Djaoeh Dimata/GA1. The edit link for this section can be used to add comments to the review.

Reviewer: Jimfbleak (talk · contribs) 06:58, 14 July 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Hi, obviously not much wrong here, but a few quibbles

  • The film's cast continued to act — not sure why this isn't quite right, it reads as if it's unusual for actors to continue to act after making a film. Perhaps something based around "went on to" might give a better sense?
  • As such, his wife Soelastri — "As such" doesn't make sense, it should refer to her, not him, and is redundant anyway
  • Untrusting of his wife and unwilling to accept the possibility that she will be unfaithful, — too many "un-"s for my taste, can it be rephrased?
  • pass her as a maid for Asrad. pass her off as?
  • he and Soelastri reconcile. — "are reconciled" seems more idiomatic
  • and all but one studio was closed — "were"
  • This included all of Multi Film's — "of" is redundant
  • All were of propagandic nature — I'd write "a propagandic nature
  • served more... Max Tera served as — change one of the "served"s

I'll have a second look and do the image/ref checks when you have had time to respond Jimfbleak - talk to me? 07:34, 14 July 2013 (UTC)[reply]

I'm happy with all the changes above. Round two! just a few suggestions, really, before I sign this off

  • soon reaches wide acclaim. — I just wonder if "achieves" reads better than "reaches"?
  • The image licences are complicated, but seem OK as far as I understand them. Is it possible to process File:Ali Yugo in Djaoeh di Mata.jpg to improve the appearance? I don't know, just asking the question.
  • Part of it is because of the halftoning used in the original printing process, which makes playing with the levels a pain in the butt. This image was printed right on the fold, which is what that black mark is. I could probably get rid of it later, — Crisco 1492 (talk) 12:54, 14 July 2013 (UTC)\[reply]
  • Some of your short-form references have roman font for publications which are italicised in the "Works cited", eg Het Dagblad/Het Dagblad. Is there a logic to this?
  • Essentially because the coding is a pain (have to use .27.27Het Dagblad.27.27 to get it to work properly; this has not been a problem to date in FACs, although I have no issue with changing to italics here. — Crisco 1492 (talk) 12:54, 14 July 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Jimfbleak - talk to me? 12:35, 14 July 2013 (UTC)[reply]

GA review (see here for criteria)
  1. It is reasonably well written.
    a (prose): b (MoS):
  2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.
    a (references): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):
  3. It is broad in its coverage.
    a (major aspects): b (focused):
  4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.
    Fair representation without bias:
  5. It is stable.
    No edit wars etc.:
  6. It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.
    a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
  7. Overall:
    Pass/Fail:

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