Talk:Dog Gone/GA1

GA Review

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I'll be conducting this review. All the elements of a good article are here, but there are a number of sourcing problems that need teido be addressed before it can pass. Please address each item line-by-line and I'll strike them as we go...

Lead

~~The link to Consuela leads to a list of characters page that does not include Consuela. Should this wikilink be removed?~~
- Done. Gage (talk) 21:23, 14 February 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Plot

There's really no need for citations in the plot summary as per WP:MOSTV, which says the episode itself serves as the primary source when it comes to plot summaries. If you want to keep the citations in there, by all means go ahead, but you don't have to.
- Done, left the first two, however. Gage (talk) 21:23, 14 February 2010 (UTC)[reply]
This plot summary is too long according to WP:MOSTV, which says a plot summary should be about 200 to 500 words. Considering this is only a 22-minute episode, there's no reason it should be above 500. I'd suggest cutting the last paragraph (about the opera singer) altogether, which would cut it down to 495 words and solve the problem right there.
- Done. Gage (talk) 21:23, 14 February 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Production

~~"First touched upon at the 2009 San Diego Comic-Con International in San Diego, California..." What does "first touched upon" mean? Could you reword to be more clear?~~
- Done. Gage (talk) 21:23, 14 February 2010 (UTC)[reply]
"...written by Callaghan before the conclusion of the seventh production season of Family Guy, and after the end of the 2007–2008 Writers Guild of America strike, of which Callaghan participated in." The source doesn't seem to reflect this...
- Done, moved the ref back a bit. Gage (talk) 21:23, 14 February 2010 (UTC)[reply]
"In comparison to previous appearances, as a one-joke character, Consuela received a much larger, expanded role in the episode, including the introduction of her adult nephew, Mikey, who attempts to sell Peter a light-up yo-yo." This needs a source.
- Done, removed sentence as I couldn't find an exact reference. Gage (talk) 21:39, 14 February 2010 (UTC)[reply]
  - "In comparison to previous appearances, as a one-joke character, Consuela received a much larger, expanded role in the episode, including the introduction of her adult nephew, Mikey." This all still needs a source.
    - Done, removed sentence as I was again unable to locate an exact reference. Gage (talk) 22:42, 14 February 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Cultural references

"In the opening scene of the episode, Stewie is seen going through Brian's internet history, which includes MapQuest directions to actress Abigail Breslin's house, and searches about himself on the internet search engine Google." The source for this information seems to be another episode ("Business Guy"). What's this about?
- Done. Gage (talk) 21:23, 14 February 2010 (UTC)[reply]
  - I still don't see this in this source, unless you can point it out to me where I'm missing it? — Hun ter Ka hn 21:45, 14 February 2010 (UTC)[reply]
    - Done, conformed sentence strictly to the source. Gage (talk) 22:26, 14 February 2010 (UTC)[reply]
~~Chris Matthews is mentioned in the source you cite, but Harry Reid and Kurtwood Smith are not...~~
- Done. Gage (talk) 21:39, 14 February 2010 (UTC)[reply]
Unless I'm missing something, the sources for the NPR All Things Considered bit, the Curious George joke, and the Consuela commercial/Lemon Pledge thing don't reflect that information.
- Done. Gage (talk) 22:41, 14 February 2010 (UTC)[reply]
As per this source, PETA was very critical of the episode/series and their portrayal in "Dog Gone". That should really be added to this section, and referenced in the lead...
- Done, this is already added as a reference, but it is not in the lead, how do you suggest it should be added? Gage (talk) 21:23, 14 February 2010 (UTC)[reply]
  - This doesn't appear to be done. It's used as a reference, but the reception section doesn't have any sentences about the fact that PETA took exception. I'd suggest adding it here, and then adding a one-sentence reference to it in the lead... — Hun ter Ka hn 21:45, 14 February 2010 (UTC)[reply]
    - Done. Gage (talk) 22:24, 14 February 2010 (UTC)[reply]

I'll place this article on hold for now. Thanks! — Hun ter Ka hn 21:02, 14 February 2010 (UTC)[reply]

GA Checklist

GA review (see here for criteria)

It is reasonably well written.
a (prose): b (MoS):
It is factually accurate and verifiable.
a (references): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):
It is broad in its coverage.
a (major aspects): b (focused):
It follows the neutral point of view policy.
Fair representation without bias:
It is stable.
No edit wars, etc.:
It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.
a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
Overall:
Pass/Fail:
Well done! That's a pass! — Hun ter Ka hn 05:02, 15 February 2010 (UTC)[reply]