Talk:East African lowland honey bee
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Wiki Education Foundation-supported course assignment
[edit] This article was the subject of a Wiki Education Foundation-supported course assignment, between 28 January 2019 and 17 May 2019. Further details are available on the course page. Student editor(s): Munzirbhatt.
Above undated message substituted from Template:Dashboard.wikiedu.org assignment by PrimeBOT (talk) 19:59, 16 January 2022 (UTC)
African/africanized
[edit]I turned the last two paragraphs into one, as they were partially redundant and seemed to be referring more to africanized bees than african ones. Michael1115 (talk) 20:22, 30 August 2009 (UTC)
I replaced the taxonomy image with an image and description from the "see also" section due to the fact that the original taxonomy image is used both on the Africanized bee page and African bee page. JourneyV (talk) 18:41, 9 May 2013 (UTC)
Unclear explanation
[edit]The article says "A. m. capensis workers increase in number within a host colony. This leads to the death of the host colony on which they depend. An important factor causing the death of a colony seems to be the dwindling numbers of A. m. scutellata workers that perform foraging duties (A. m. capensis workers are greatly under-represented in the foraging force of an infected colony) owing to death of the queen, and, before queen death, competition for egg laying between A. m. capensis workers and the queen. When the colony dies, the capensis females will seek out a new host colony."
It is not clear what are the mechanics behind the collapse of the host colony. It is not clear why workers are under-represented and why the queen should die.
ICE77 (talk) 17:29, 1 December 2012 (UTC)
New sections
[edit]Hi all- I added the section on foraging behavior and its evolution. Please tell me what you think! I am an undergraduate at Washington University in St. Louis and I am editing this for a behavioral ecology Wikipedia class. Amruthapk (talk) 00:48, 4 October 2013 (UTC)
Peer Review
[edit]- italicize species name
- In ‘Energetic benefits of warm nectar,’ the sentence, “The bumblebee’s ability to differentiate flower warmth by color and target warmer flowers is one noted precedent for nectar temperature selection in honeybees,” can be included in paragrpahs above
- In the last paragraph under “Significance of foraging behavior in worker bees,” the very first part seems unnatural. Is using a semi-colon correct?
- Is the information first paragraph in ‘evolution’ all from one source?
- In the first paragraph under ‘Evolution,’ period should be outside the parenthesis.
- Put access dates and url to the page that the paper you cited came from.
- Write something in the talk page so people know what you changed and when
Overall, the article is easy to understand. Pocketkings (talk) 08:07, 7 October 2013 (UTC)
Peer Review: First of all, I found the foraging sections very informative! Great job on research! I have a few suggestions for the editor:
- Try to keep the language a little more simple - there are several sentences that I had to re-read a few times because of their length and use of scientific language. I think it's important to use words that are precise, but this article for the most part should be understandable to non-biology majors.
- Along with the above suggestion, I would define certain terms like "thermoregulatory imbalance", "crop loads", "fitness advantage", and "quantitative trait loci."
- The article has both a section of evolution under foraging and then just a section on evolution. It might be best to consolidate the two, or rename one of them, since they do discuss different evolutionary implications.
- It may be worth adding sections about the eusociality of bees, the caste system and colony population structure.
I also agree with the comments from the other peer editor - I did change all the species names to italics, but do remember to do this in the future. Keep up the good work, and I hope my comments help! Blubird25 (talk) 02:08, 11 October 2013 (UTC)
Round Two
[edit]- The intro is a bit wordy; some of the sentences can be more concise.
- "Character" seems to be a poor heading, and should not be first. This section also needs more citations. It's also rather disjointed (half on stings, half on honey production)
- I'm not sure that you need all the in text citations under "Energetic Benefits of Warm Nectar," since they're all from the same source. This occurs elsewhere. I find them to get in the way more than they help.
- Only the first word of a header and proper nouns within the header should be capitalized
- Use active voice!
- Many of your sentences can be more concise
- Evolution section needs citations
- I reduced the bulk in some very wordy sentences, but there's still a lot to be done.
- Call the animal the same thing throughout the article. In "Parasitization," you refer to the animal by an abbreviated name which does not appear elsewhere.
- Overall, I think this article has a large number of minor issues which you can easily fix. I do not believe the article has any major flaws.
Gharris7 (talk) 03:07, 1 November 2013 (UTC)Gharris7