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Reviewer: Jens Lallensack (talk · contribs) 20:52, 10 January 2022 (UTC)[reply]


Reviewing now. --Jens Lallensack (talk) 20:52, 10 January 2022 (UTC)[reply]

I honestly don't think this is anywhere close to meeting the GA criteria. Only some main points here:

  • Start more slowly, define things, provide more background. The "Ecological relationship" starts well with a general definition, but then jumps to the next thing and then to the next, and then we are left with a list of non-coherent examples. Structure and a common threat is lacking in this article.
    • Reworked.
  • Ovivores, for example: the term should be defined in a sentence of its own, and I think there should be a "Definitions" sections discussing the terminology.
    • Added.
  • The article is poorly organized, including single-sentence paragraphs, and one single heading to capture all.
    • Reorganized.
  • Many important aspects of the article are not covered at all, including, but not limited to:
    • the fossil record (Sanajeh comes to mind, but there is more; which is the oldest record of egg predation? Also see Oviraptor ("egg thief") for misinterpretations)
      • Added both.
    • Controlling of egg predators (search for DRC-1339 treated eggs)
      • Added.
    • Strategies to avoid egg predators in animals (only touched on, but there must be much more)
      • Added.
    • r/K selection theory surely needs to be discussed as well
      • Added.
    • Some of the topics already briefly mentioned would, I think, need their own section, e.g. egg predation of introduced species (especially on islands).
      • Added.
    • Also, adaptations for egg predation, both anatomical and behavioral (using stones to crack open eggs, etc.)
      • Added some corvid behaviour.

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  • in which they consume the eggs of other species. – this does not seem to be a necessity, see [1] as an example for intraspecific egg predation.
    • Fixed.
  • Lead: Egg predation is found widely across the animal kingdom, – the following list of groups reads repetitive, as the first sentence already states "including fish, birds, snakes and insects". Maybe shorten the latter accordingly?
    • Done.
  • Lead lacks some wikilinks
    • Edited.
  • including in insects – why restricting to insects rather than arthropods? See here fore egg predation by copepods: [2]
    • Fixed.
  • Lead: Snakes specialising in egg predation have greatly reduced venom, implying that the main function of venom is to subdue prey. – I think the lead should focus on summarizing the general points made in the article, not on specific examples?
    • Removed.
  • late Cretaceous --> Late Cretaceous
    • Done.
  • link Sanajeh in image caption?
    • Done.
  • such as Eider ducks – why is it capitalised?
    • Fixed.
  • Optional: An interesting and complex case of nest predation here [3], might be worth to mention.
    • A curious case. Added.
  • Maybe it is worth stating the difference between egg predation and egg parasitism? --Jens Lallensack (talk) 13:49, 11 January 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Closing note: The article made a huge step forwards, and is no meeting the GA criteria. Congrats! --Jens Lallensack (talk) 19:57, 11 January 2022 (UTC)[reply]