Talk:Endgame (Rise Against album)/GA1

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Reviewer: Lizzy150 (talk · contribs) 16:01, 4 January 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Hey @Famous Hobo:

I will be assessing this article. Looks quite good. Here's my comments after a quick read..

Lead

"After a lengthy tour in support of Appeal to Reason" - I assume that's their previous album, so perhaps state that.
"It remains Rise Against's highest position on the chart." - Would it be better to state that it's a record, eg. 'It holds the record for the band's highest position on the chart'?
"charted highly" - you've used this in two paragraphs already, so I'll be inclined to reword one of them.
"although some reviewers felt" - probably don't need the word 'reviewers' here again.

Background

"over three week period"- over a three week period

Composition

"slick production" - what does that exactly mean? It was a smooth recording process?
"Social and political commentary" - should we mention specifics, as this is quite a broad subject?
"about the slow response time for aid to disaster stricken areas" - I feel as if you could simplify this sentence a little, eg. 'about the slow response for providing disaster relief' (you could then wiki link disaster relief)

Release

What's the reason for using numbers and words to express figures? (eg. number 22', 'number forty-five') Should we be consistent?

Reception

No issues here, the content is good. However, how did you structure this? The first and second paragraphs are positive reviews, with the last sentences being a negative. The third and last paragraphs look like a mixed review? Do you think its worth making it clear-cut, for instance, first paragraph is positive, second is mixed and third is negative?

However, article is mostly well-written. Appears to be stable and neutral. Broadly covered, no copyright violations detected. Appropriately illustrated with media and image files. There are sufficient inline citations and all references are working. If I find any more issues, I will post them below. Thanks, Just Lizzy^(talk) 16:01, 4 January 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Comment: @Lizzy150: I agree that this article is quite good, but I suggest that reception should be re-titled to critical reception, which release should be re-titled to release and promotion. Also, the album charted on the year end Billboard 200 and Rock Albums charts in the US, which can be added to the year end charts; this should be on the left side of the col with weekly charts since it is charts and certifications section, while certification should remain on the right. --Kyle Peake (talk) 19:45, 4 January 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks for your comment Kyle. @Famous Hobo: where are you with this article? Have you made all the necessary changes? Thanks, Just Lizzy^(talk) 22:48, 15 February 2020 (UTC)[reply]

@Lizzy150: My apologies for the delay, but I think I have addressed your issues. Regarding the reception section, I tried to model it after video game articles. The first paragraph gives a general overview of whether critics liked the album or not, then each subsequent paragraphs focuses on a specific part of the album, such as the music or the lyrics. Famous Hobo (talk) 17:14, 29 February 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Great! Now passing. Just Lizzy^(talk) 12:05, 2 March 2020 (UTC)[reply]