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Reviewer: The Rambling Man (talk · contribs) 17:00, 13 August 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Comments - first up, sorry for the delay, you've waited long enough for a review! And a very nice article too.

Didn't notice the review comments – I'll take care of them now. Thanks for the review! Holiday56 (talk) 06:15, 30 August 2013 (UTC)[reply]

"by the record label Mo' Wax." I think it would sound more natural as "on the Mo' Wax record label".
- Addressed below by EditorE. Holiday56 (talk) 06:15, 30 August 2013 (UTC)[reply]
  - Done 和DITOR E tails 15:07, 28 August 2013 (UTC)[reply]
"entirely out of sampled " no need for "out".
- Addressed below by EditorE. Holiday56 (talk) 06:15, 30 August 2013 (UTC)[reply]
  - Removed 和DITOR E tails 15:07, 28 August 2013 (UTC)[reply]
" In creating its overall atmosphere" -> "In creating the album's overall atmosphere"
- Addressed below by EditorE. Holiday56 (talk) 06:15, 30 August 2013 (UTC)[reply]
  - Done 和DITOR E tails 15:07, 28 August 2013 (UTC)[reply]
If "Midnight in a Perfect World" charted, like "Stem", why doesn't it have an article, or simply red-linked?
- I don't know why, and honestly, there really is no need to make an argument like this in even a FA review. 和DITOREtails 15:07, 28 August 2013 (UTC)[reply]
  - What do you mean? If the single is notable, it should either be redlinked or have an article. The Rambling Man (talk) 16:12, 28 August 2013 (UTC)[reply]
    - The song link is actually a redirect to the album article.
      - I've linked several instances of the song in the article. Holiday56 (talk) 06:15, 30 August 2013 (UTC)[reply]
"the beats he managed to create" -> "the beats he created"
- Done. Holiday56 (talk) 07:15, 30 August 2013 (UTC)[reply]
"out of sampled elements" -> "from samples"
- Done. Holiday56 (talk) 06:15, 30 August 2013 (UTC)[reply]
"arrangements influencing countless other " countless is too much POV.
- Removed "countless". Holiday56 (talk) 06:15, 30 August 2013 (UTC)[reply]
In the lead, you call him DJ Shadow once, then just Shadow throughout. Why not adopt this approach in the main body of the article?
- "DJ Shadow" is mentioned in the body of the article, in the production and composition sections. Irrelevant argument here. 和DITOREtails 15:07, 28 August 2013 (UTC)[reply]
  - No, not irrelevant. It's adopting a consistent approach to how you refer to him. The Rambling Man (talk) 16:12, 28 August 2013 (UTC)[reply]
    - I've applied the necessary changes for the sake of consistency. Holiday56 (talk) 07:15, 30 August 2013 (UTC)[reply]
"genre-bending works of art that merged elements" this must be a quote, so it needs attribution. Otherwise, it's no way neutral in tone!
- Attributed to its author. Holiday56 (talk) 06:33, 30 August 2013 (UTC)[reply]
"with almost all composition being done on the sampler" -> "being done"? yuck. nasty prose.
- Reworded. Holiday56 (talk) 07:15, 30 August 2013 (UTC)[reply]
"DJ Shadow has said that" has said, or just said?
- Not sure what you mean by this comment; how would you suggest I change this particular phrase? Holiday56 (talk) 07:15, 30 August 2013 (UTC)[reply]
  - Looking at it, I think "has said" is fine. It's kind of difficult to explain, but it seems right to me. In a context like this, of an artist taking a retrospective look on his work, it seems appropriate. Lazy Bastard Guy 19:04, 30 August 2013 (UTC)[reply]
", by Mo' Wax" -> "on Mo' Wax"
- Addressed below by EditorE. Holiday56 (talk) 06:15, 30 August 2013 (UTC)[reply]
  - Done 和DITOR E tails 15:07, 28 August 2013 (UTC)[reply]

The Rambling Man (talk) 14:18, 26 August 2013 (UTC)[reply]

I'll suggest the nominator to take care of these issues, as I'll be wanting to do other stuff on Wikipedia. 和DITOREtails 23:01, 29 August 2013 (UTC)[reply]
- Will do—thanks for making some of the necessary changes. Holiday56 (talk) 06:15, 30 August 2013 (UTC)[reply]