Talk:English cricket team in Bangladesh in 2009–10

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2009–10 rather than 2010[edit]

I have moved this page back to its original name, as the cricket season in which this match took place was 2009–10. Despite the fact that the matches were all in 2010, this would always be listed under 2009–10 in sources such as ESPNcricinfo, CricketArchive and Wisden. Harrias talk 06:58, 11 October 2011 (UTC)[reply]

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Reviewer: The Rambling Man (talk · contribs) 21:57, 25 March 2015 (UTC)[reply]


Comments

  • I would start the opening sentence with when they played, then what they played, to avoid that comma so early on.
  • "due to regular captain" not keen on "due to", perhaps "because"?
  • And is it worth noting in the lead why it was controversial?
  • Put ODI in parentheses after the first use of the expanded version.
  • Do we have a suitable link for "all-rounder" for our non-cricketing readers?
  • Last sentence of lead reads poorly to me. It sort of implies the criticism came about as a direct result of Kieswetter being included, not the other foreign-born players.
  • I've left this as it is, because for this series, it was the specific selection of Kieswetter that drew the criticism. Albeit largely because he was perceived as the next in a series of them. Harrias talk 11:26, 26 March 2015 (UTC)[reply]
  • I'm not sure if you should have that quote from Vaughan in the lead only. Perhaps just note in the lead that he was critical and move the quote into the body with the other quote.
  • Tweaked this around a bit, how is it now? Harrias talk 11:26, 26 March 2015 (UTC)[reply]
  • "In 12 previous" perhaps a personal preference, but I would read this better as "In the 12 previous..."
  • Another "due to" for the West Indies weakening, not keen.
  • Should link Twenty20.
  • "chronic injury on his right knee" I'm not sure you have an injury "on" something, more likely "to".
  • "This decision was not viewed universally accepted" is there a reason for "viewed" in here?
  • You could mention that Beefy and Athers were former captains...
  • I'm not certain, but I think you need a space before the ellipsis in the Beefy quote.
  • "to their squads, naming bowlers Ajmal Shahzad and James Tredwell in both squads" I don't think you need the first "to their squads"
  • "of impressive performance" needs an s.
  • "qualification period for England" this may be unclear to a non-expert.
  • I've added a note which hopefully explains this? Harrias talk 11:26, 26 March 2015 (UTC)[reply]
  • " surrounding the England squad" to avoid repeating squad once again, perhaps just "surrounding England,"
  • Our article on Steve Davies calls him Steven. No big deal, but is that better?
  • " bad balls" I prefer the term "deliveries" (which can be linked)
  • I'm mildly confused why "down the wicket" is linked to Dot ball. I guess to get closer in the glossary? Either way it's a confusing.
  • I believe we can link "not out".
  • "Sher-e-Bangla National Cricket Stadium " appears to have the word "National" in its title.
  • Link spinner.
  • "match began in similar fashion to the first match, " try avoid reptitive prose, maybe replace one with ODI?
  • Is there a suitable link for "partnership"?
  • Ditto for "crease"?
  • And "run-rate"?
  • "Slow-scoring " no hyphen required.
  • "announced his retirement from international cricket two days earlier" I seem to recall in the lead that you went on to explain who replaced him, but that's not mentioned here?
  • Perhaps I've misunderstood, but what I mean is that you have more in the lead than in the main article about this. The Rambling Man (talk) 12:10, 26 March 2015 (UTC)[reply]
  • Sorry, missed this on my second pass through! I'll take a look this evening. Harrias talk 12:31, 26 March 2015 (UTC)[reply]
  • (It was a bit of a slack day at work today, I'm calling this evening...) Added this in, and actually explained a bit more. Harrias talk 16:10, 26 March 2015 (UTC)[reply]
  • "until wrongly dismissed" I would make this "until he was wrongly dismissed"
  • "follow on" is hyphenated.
  • Link "slip"?
  • And "sweep"?
  • "ESPNcricinfo " italics or not italics? Be consistent.
  • "from Abdur Razzak to allow" not linking to the right Razzak.
  • Not much to be gained from abbreviating DRS when it's never used.
  • "for the used of the " lose the d.
  • "both made starts" do you mean "good" starts?
  • "Bandladesh" switch the d for a g.
  • Ref 1, should be The Daily Telegraph.

I believe that is enough of my pedantry. I'll put the article on hold. The Rambling Man (talk) 07:14, 26 March 2015 (UTC)[reply]

  • Right, I've had one pass through and done the easy stuff. I've left notes for myself on those not done, but I'll come back to these later. Harrias talk 08:09, 26 March 2015 (UTC)[reply]
  • Another pass through, and I've made changes for all but one point, which I'm not sure about. Harrias talk 11:26, 26 March 2015 (UTC)[reply]
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