Talk:Eurovision Song Contest 1956/GA1
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Reviewer: Sammi Brie (talk · contribs) 05:49, 11 August 2022 (UTC)
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I've only really watched one and a half ESCs, but from what I do know about the contest, this is like early American football to the sport today—nigh unrecognizable! Some copy cleanup to do. Consider adding alt text. Looks good though. Pinging Sims2aholic8 for the 7-day hold on this. Ping me when you're done making changes. Sammi Brie (she/her • t • c) 06:22, 11 August 2022 (UTC)
Copy changes
[edit]Lead
[edit]- the majority of the broadcast is however available in audio Set off "however" with commas: "is, however, available"
Origins
[edit]- "Corportation" typo
- "Following the formation of the EBU" add comma
- Don't capitalize "president". MOS:JOBTITLES
- Venice International Song Festival—the gloss in the first paragraph of Format belongs here on first mention.
Format
[edit]- Each participating organisation had sole discretion on how to select their entries for the contest, but were strongly encouraged by the EBU to hold their own national contests to determine their representatives. Remove the comma or add "the organisations" before "were strongly encouraged". See User:Sammi Brie/Commas in sentences for more. Other errors of this type are denoted (C in S)
- Each song was accompanied by the Radiosa Orchestra, supplemented by the strings of the Italian Swiss Radio Symphony Orchestra, with 24 members total, which was presided over by the contest's musical director, Fernando Paggi. Consider reflowing this sentence because of the number of commas.
- The event was hosted by in Italian by Lohengrin Filipello — extra "by"
- Upon the announcement of the results only the winning song was named, with the full breakdown of the jury votes not revealed. — add comma after "the results"
Participating countries
[edit]- Austria and Denmark are believed to have also been interested in participating, however broadcasters from those countries reportedly missed the cut-off point for entry; these two countries, as well as the United Kingdom, would however broadcast the contest along with the participating countries, with the United Kingdom's BBC having chosen to not send an entry for this event in favour of organising their own contest, the Festival of British Popular Songs. This is a long sentence. It also needs a MOS:HOWEVER fix. Consider Austria and Denmark are believed to have also been interested in participating; however, broadcasters from those countries reportedly missed the cut-off point for entry. These two countries, as well as the United Kingdom, would broadcast the contest along with the participating countries, with the United Kingdom's BBC having chosen to not send an entry for this event in favour of organising their own contest, the Festival of British Popular Songs.
- The full results of the contest were not revealed, and have not been retained by the EBU. — remove comma (C in S) (There is also a C in S error in footnote a)
- Known details on the broadcasts in each country, including the specific broadcasting stations and commentators are shown in the tables below. — add a comma after "commentators" to complete the appositive
- Audio of most of the contest have however survived — should be "has, however, survived"
Source spot checks
[edit]I randomly selected six references to check. All pass (AGF on 14).
- 7: This official history of Eurovision is generally a bit redundant to ref 5, but with 5 it does check out.
- 13: Mentions the venue name as "Teatro Kursaal".
- 14: Official history of the Casino Lugano mentions the opening of the casino. I presume offline source [15] has more information on its demolition?
- 31: Official list of ESC winners backs up the claims about "Refrain"
- 40: La Stampa newspaper archive mentions television airing
- 42: Seems a bit of a bare page, but it does link to the RTL site, and if they were the EBU member this should be self-evident.
Other
[edit]- There are two freely licensed images and one fair-use image with an appropriate rationale. The logo is PD-textlogo and is also used by the EBU itself (I was wondering how authentic it'd be, but if even Eurovision use it...) They do need alt text (not required strictly for GA but I always encourage editors to add it).
- Earwig catches a source that definitely copied from a recent revision of this article (97.4%). Beyond that, Earwig mostly catches organization names and formulations like "original language, as well as translations".
- Run IABot again, as not all references archived.
- @Sammi Brie: Thanks for conducting this review! I believe I have now covered all the points raised above (and gained a better understanding of commas along the way). Let me know if there is anything further you need in order to pass this article. Sims2aholic8 (talk) 08:58, 11 August 2022 (UTC)