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GA Review

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Reviewer: Coemgenus (talk · contribs) 14:08, 8 January 2017 (UTC)[reply]

I'll review this over the next few days. --Coemgenus (talk) 14:08, 8 January 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Checklist

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GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)
  1. It is reasonably well written.
    a (prose, spelling, and grammar): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
  2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.
    a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR): d (copyvio and plagiarism):
  3. It is broad in its coverage.
    a (major aspects): b (focused):
  4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.
    Fair representation without bias:
  5. It is stable.
    No edit wars, etc.:
  6. It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
    a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
  7. Overall:
    Pass/Fail:

Comments

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Lede
LIRR use
  • "The Far Rockaway Branch of the Long Island Rail Road had originally been part of a loop that traveled along the existing route..." This would be more useful if it described "the existing route" geographically--the reader is not likely to know what that means otherwise.
  • "2nd" and "3rd" would be better as "second" and "third".
Subway use
  • "Frequent fires and maintenance problems, the most notorious of which was a fire in May 1950 between The Raunt and Broad Channel Stations,[14] led the LIRR to abandon the Queens portion of the Rockaway Beach/Far Rockaway route." I'd break this into two sentences, something like "The route was plagued by frequent fires and maintenance problems, the most notorious of which was a fire in May 1950 between The Raunt and Broad Channel Stations.[14] This led the LIRR to abandon the Queens portion of the Rockaway Beach/Far Rockaway route.[citation]"
  • "On June 11, 1952, all trackage west of Mott Avenue was acquired by the city..." It sounds better if you avoid the passive voice here. As in "On June 11, 1952, the city acquired all trackage west of Mott Avenue..."
Station layout
  • I'm not sure "Exit" needs to be a separate subsection here. But if you want to keep it, I don't object.
Images