Talk:French submarine Y

GA Review

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Reviewer: Amitchell125 (talk · contribs) 19:15, 14 August 2023 (UTC)

Happy to review this one. AM

Review comments

Lead section / infobox

• stricken – (here and in the text of the article) ‘struck’? (“Stricken” usually refers to something being struck down by something bad, e.g. a disease or a blow.)

• True, but my sources specifically use stricken.

Understood. AM

• The ‘Total ships scrapped=1’ line in the infobox seems unnecessary, as information to tell readers the machine was scrapped is provided.
• I have uploaded an image at Wikicommons here, which I think could be included in the article.
  • That's actually X, not Y. I did forget to upload a plan of Y's hull showing her torpedo installation, which is about the only out-of-copyright image that I've been able to find.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 09:46, 16 August 2023 (UTC)

Apologies, the online source labelled it as Y. Amitchell125 (talk) 10:51, 16 August 2023 (UTC)

Nothing to apologize for.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 11:14, 16 August 2023 (UTC)

1 Background and description

• Consider linking diesel engine; combustion.
  • Diesel is linked in the lede, combustion added
• Replace the link for overall length with Length overall.
  • Good catch
• 44.9 metres (147 ft 4 in) – I haven’t seen these units linked for a long time—are the links needed here?
  • No, not at all
• Y had an overall length – the text in this paragraph should be amended so that Y is properly introduced. I would start the sentence with something like ‘Y was a single-hulled submarine that had an overall length’.
  • I'm not at all sure that it's necessary since Y is introduced in the lede as a submarine.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 09:59, 16 August 2023 (UTC)

I am sure. The main article isn't a continuation of the lead section, and so it should be explained what Y is where it is first mentioned in the main text. Amitchell125 (talk) 10:45, 16 August 2023 (UTC)

Done.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 11:16, 16 August 2023 (UTC)

2 Construction and career

• Link commissioned (as in the lead); Gaston Thomson.
  • If it's linked in the lede, I see no point to link it again, especially for such a short article.
• the Navy Minister – consider amending to ‘the French Navy Minister’, for the sake of clarity.
  • This seems unnecessary as what other country's Navy Minister could it be?
• Unlink decommissioned (disambiguation page, and not imo needed).
  • Done.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 10:05, 16 August 2023 (UTC)

On hold

I'm putting the article on hold for a week until 24 August to allow time for the issues raised to be addressed. Regards, Amitchell125 (talk) 06:58, 16 August 2023 (UTC)

Passing

Nice work, passing now. Regards, Amitchell125 (talk) 11:41, 16 August 2023 (UTC)

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