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Reviewer: HickoryOughtShirt?4 (talk · contribs) 03:53, 19 August 2020 (UTC)
- It is reasonably well written.
- It is factually accurate and verifiable.
- a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR): d (copyvio and plagiarism):
- a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR): d (copyvio and plagiarism):
- It is broad in its coverage.
- a (major aspects): b (focused):
- a (major aspects): b (focused):
- It follows the neutral point of view policy.
- Fair representation without bias:
- Fair representation without bias:
- It is stable.
- No edit wars, etc.:
- No edit wars, etc.:
- It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
- a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
- a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
- Overall: Pass
- Pass/Fail:
- Pass/Fail:
Review[edit]
Lead[edit]
- Maybe WL segregationists
- Wl Bye (sports)
Background[edit]
- The first time you mention Ramblers (out of lead) is in the second paragraph. Should probably be mentioned earlier
- I would mention
On February 18, Loyola was awarded one of eleven at-large bids for the tournament
before the February 28 incident- In progress The Feb 28 incident was less of a singularly-important event, and more like an example of what they were facing all season. But I see how the lack of chronological order is confusing when I only touch on the discrimination aspect so briefly. I think I'm going to split the discrimination bit into its own paragraph and add more details of other incidents. I will try to add that shortly... –IagoQnsi (talk) 18:01, 30 August 2020 (UTC)
- Kind of odd how the Dean W. Colvard sentence is by itself. Please either merge it or expand on it to preferably three-four sentences.
- Why is reference 13 used twice for quotes? It can just be placed at the end of the second quote
- Please see Wikipedia:Manual of Style/Words to watch. Don't love the use of
In any event
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Game summary[edit]
- Why is reference 22 used twice for quotes? It can just be placed at the end of the second quote.
Aftermath[edit]
Legacy[edit]
- Boxscore reference (#27) is not needed since the info is already stated in reference #26
- How can reference 28 be used to verify a fact for an event that happened after it was published?
- Comment: I've dug up an archive link for that citation if you'd like to see for yourself. Apparently the list of inductees was announced prior to the actual induction ceremony. –IagoQnsi (talk) 18:01, 30 August 2020 (UTC)
- Are two references needed to verify
The team was also inducted into the Chicagoland Sports Hall of Fame on September 18, 2013
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Discussion[edit]
Hi HickoryOughtShirt?4; thanks for taking the time to review this! I've made most of the changes you listed, and responded inline where I haven't changed them. Cheers, IagoQnsi (talk) 18:01, 30 August 2020 (UTC)
- IagoQnsi Thank you so much, I agree with all of your notes (including why you didn't change some things). Once the in progress incident is fixed I can pass this. HickoryOughtShirt?4 (talk) 18:15, 30 August 2020 (UTC)
- @HickoryOughtShirt?4: Okay, I think the Loyola background is good to go now. I've added info about another incident, and restructured the second and third paragraphs a bit so that there's basically one paragraph about racial issues and one about basketball performance. Let me know what you think! Thanks, IagoQnsi (talk) 19:56, 30 August 2020 (UTC)