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Reviewer: K. Peake (talk · contribs) 20:51, 23 May 2021 (UTC)
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I see your GT nom coming soon; will review this for it! --K. Peake 20:51, 23 May 2021 (UTC)
Infobox and lead
[edit]- Are you sure JackBoys should be listed as an artist in the infobox, or should the label only be mentioned in prose like "Clique"?
- Travis Scott should be before Pop Smoke for correct order, plus remove the comma directly prior to and
- "American rappers Pop Smoke and Travis Scott, the latter of who is" → "rappers Travis Scott and Pop Smoke, the former of whom is" plus mention it being from the compilation album at the end of this sentence and add release year in brackets since an exact one for a release on the album is not notable for the lead. Also, is it really correct to stay "is a song by" then the label's name when it is not a performer?
- Just realized JackBoys is not a record label. I'm also keeping that Pop Smoke and Travis Scott are Americans.
- Wikilink compilation album
- "the song's production while Axl" → "the song's production, while Axl"
- "Travis Scott raps about his former girlfriend Kylie Jenner and." → "it sees Travis Scott rap about Kylie Jenner and."
Not done Jenner was Travis Scott's girlfriend at the time. All the sources talk about him rapping about why they broke up.
- Shoot for the Stars The introduction to her as his former girlfriend being solely in the body is sufficient, especially since it says here that he raps about them breaking up. --K. Peake 07:45, 25 May 2021 (UTC)
- Move the critical reception sentence to being the last one of the first para
- "It reached the" → "It also reached the"
- "around the streets in New York" → "around New York's streets"
- "Bugatti Chiron, with Pop Smoke sitting in" → "Bugatti Chiron while Pop Smoke is sat in" to be less repetitive with the body, with the wikilink
- "the use of the Bugatti Chiron in the video." → "its usage of the Bugatti Chiron."
Background and release
[edit]- Wikilink Cactus Jack Records
- "Travic Scott released JackBoys'" → "Travis Scott released JackBoys"
- The pre-order is not sourced
- Only the song titles leaking is sourced in the December 26 sentence, plus pipe Shazam to Shazam (application)
- "the help of American rapper" → "the help of fellow rapper"
- Left that he is American
- Shoot for the Stars You should use "fellow rapper" instead because Travis Scott is an American rapper, so Pop Smoke being one too is clear from the usage of the term "fellow". --K. Peake 07:45, 25 May 2021 (UTC)
- Left that he is American
- "to be on the track "Gatti"." → "to be on "Gatti"."
- The writing/production info should be before the release date of the album
- "from Scott and the label's compilation album, JackBoys," → "on Travis Scott and the label's compilation album JackBoys" with the wikilink
- Add a sentence after the JackBoys release date about the song's inclusion as a Target bonus track on Meet the Woo 2, especially since you are working on this article for the GT
- "Peter Klapka. 808Melo handled the song's production while" → "Peter Klapka, while 808Melo handled its production and" to be less wordy
Music and lyrics
[edit]- On the img text, something like "writers" or "publications" would be more appropriate than critics and "was rapping about his" → "raps about his"
- The sources only call "Gatti" drill-inspired, so use the PF ref here instead because that sources the genre itself
- ""woozy, percussive track"." → ""woozy, percussive song"." per the source
- "soars a few" → "delivers a few" to be more encyclopaedic
- "Many critics considered that Travis Scott raps about" → "Many writers considered that the lyrics allude to"
- "depicted Travis Scott references" → "depicted that Travis Scott references"
- "it seemed that Travis Scott is" → "it seems like Travis Scott is"
Critical reception
[edit]- "as [Travis Scott] invades" → "as [the latter] invades"
- "Aron A. for HotNewHipHop said it" → "Aron A., for HotNewHipHop, said the song"
- "high expectations set for the song"." → "high expectations set"." since this is basically implied
- Surround 'Welcome to the Party' by single speech marks, as the title is inside a quote
- "He continues, saying Pop Smoke's" → "He continued, saying Pop Smoke's"
- "He concludes, mentioning" → "Concluding his review, Cortez mentioned"
Commercial performance
[edit]- [24] is not used for any part of the first sentence so why is it there?
- It tells us that Gatti peaked at number 69 in the US
- Shoot for the Stars I am referring to the lyrics source; where does it mention that? --K. Peake 07:45, 25 May 2021 (UTC)
- It tells us that Gatti peaked at number 69 in the US
- "also peaked at" → "further peaked at"
Music video
[edit]Background and synopsis
[edit]- Wikilink music video
- Pipe NSFW to Not safe for work
- Pipe slow-motion to Slow motion
- "stated the video has a" → "stated it has a"
- Pipe lo-fi to Lo-fi photography
- "the streets in New York" → "the streets of New York"
- Wikilink Bugatti Chiron
- McDonalds → McDonald's, with the wikilink
- "that much, but instead" → "very much, but instead"
Critical reception
[edit]- ""you could watch" → ""[y]ou could watch" per the source
- Wikilink Darth Vader
- Remove pipe on Billboard
- ""fiery tandem bring [Pop Smoke and Travis Scott into a] frenetic energy"." → "the "fiery tandem" of Pop Smoke and Travis Scott "bring their frenetic energy into the streets of New York"." per the source
Credits and personnel
[edit]- Good
Charts
[edit]- See MOS:TABLECAPTION
References
[edit]- Copyvio score looks pretty good at 31.5%!!
- Fix MOS:CAPS issues with ref 3
- Fix MOS:CAPS and MOS:QWQ issues with ref 4, plus are you sure Strapped is a reliable source like citing a reputable publication's tweet?
- Removed it
- Fix MOS:QWQ issues with ref 9
- Cite Uproxx as publisher instead for ref 35
- Cite the correct URL for ref 36
Final comments and verdict
[edit]On hold until all of the issues are fixed; hopefully the GT comes to fruition! --K. Peake 09:48, 24 May 2021 (UTC)
- Kyle Peake Thank you so much!!! I have addressed all of ur concerns. You know I'm shooting for the stars, aiming for the moon 💫 (talk) 05:54, 25 May 2021 (UTC)
- Kyle Peake Fixed all the issues you have left. You know I'm shooting for the stars, aiming for the moon 💫 (talk) 01:21, 26 May 2021 (UTC)
- Shoot for the Stars ✓ Pass now, good job but can you reassess the KSG FAC now I've replaced Hypebeast? --K. Peake 08:03, 26 May 2021 (UTC)
- Kyle Peake Fixed all the issues you have left. You know I'm shooting for the stars, aiming for the moon 💫 (talk) 01:21, 26 May 2021 (UTC)
- Kyle Peake Thank you so much!!! I have addressed all of ur concerns. You know I'm shooting for the stars, aiming for the moon 💫 (talk) 05:54, 25 May 2021 (UTC)