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Reviewer: Tezero (talk · contribs) 05:59, 30 December 2014 (UTC)[reply]


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Criteria: 1a. prose () 1b. MoS () 2a. ref layout () 2b. cites WP:RS () 2c. no WP:OR () 2d. no WP:CV ()
3a. broadness () 3b. focus () 4. neutral () 5. stable () 6a. free or tagged images () 6b. pics relevant ()
Note: this represents where the article stands relative to the Good Article criteria. Criteria marked are unassessed

Tezero, thank your for your review. Please find my comments below. Borsoka (talk) 06:41, 30 December 2014 (UTC) Comments:[reply]

  • You might want to list the languages of foreign-language sources in the citations using the "|language=" parameter; I see at least one in Romanian and one in Hungarian.
  • What's the relevance of most of the "Transylvania on the eve of the Hungarian conquest" section? Gelou isn't mentioned by name at all until the end.
    • As per WP:NPOV, I think, we should provide a background (based on scholarly works) of the alleged principality of Gelou which takes into account not only the sole source of Gelou's life (the late 12th- or early 13th-century Gesta Hungarorum), but also sources for the late 9th and early 10th century history of Transylvania (including archaeology). Reliable sources cited in the article also applied this approach (I refer to the works written by Madgearu of Gelou's alleged duchy). I suggest that we should follow those scholarly works to avoid WP:OR. Borsoka (talk) 06:41, 30 December 2014 (UTC)[reply]
  • Are there any estimates about Gelou's years of birth and death? I can gather that it was sometime in the 10th century, but anything beyond that?

I'll be back to review the rest later. Tezero (talk) 05:59, 30 December 2014 (UTC)[reply]

Tezero, thank your for continuing your review. Please find my comments below. Borsoka (talk) 06:27, 31 December 2014 (UTC)[reply]

  • Alright, so is it "Gesta Hungarorum" or "the Gesta Hungarorum". Either's fine, but pick one.
  • Why is "imaginary figure" in quotes?
  • "giving the right hand of their own free will" - What does this mean? Just that they conceded? If so, the quote's probably unnecessary.
  • What does "Eskellő" mean? "Place of swearing"? Is it a place named after "someone who swears"? Just the verb "to swear" doesn't tell everything.
  • "Gelou was named after Gilău (Gyalu in Hungarian), a Transylvanian village in which Gelou dies in the Gesta" - Why isn't this village mentioned earlier, when the article's actually describing his death and its aftermath?
  • What's the etymology of "Geloupara", if applicable? I know that Thracian is some kind of Indo-European language, but nothing beyond that.
  • The article makes inconsistent use of the Oxford comma - e.g. "Spurs, weapons, and other Frankish objects" vs. "Iernut, Tărtăria and other Transylvanian sites". Again, either's fine, but pick one.

That should be it. I haven't read through every part of this in depth but it looks alright to me, so I'll pass it if these are addressed. Tezero (talk) 05:45, 31 December 2014 (UTC)[reply]