Talk:Guilty Gear Isuka/GA2

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Reviewer: Tezero (talk · contribs) 01:20, 10 March 2014 (UTC)[reply]

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Criteria: 1a. prose () 1b. MoS () 2a. ref layout () 2b. cites WP:RS () 2c. no WP:OR () 2d. no WP:CV ()

3a. broadness () 3b. focus () 4. neutral () 5. stable () 6a. free or tagged images () 6b. pics relevant ()

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The article's close; I only really have a few gripes about wording and grammar.

"PS2 version" --> "the PS2 version"
"configuration, that" --> "configuration that"
"start a fight" --> "starts a fight"
Dequote all instances of "soul" except the first.
"intallments features" --> "installments' features"
"allows to perform" --> "allow the player to perform"
"super moves and break combinations and super moves, respectively.": This is ambiguous. Is it that the tension gauge allows the player to use super moves and break combinations, while the burst gauge only allows them to use super moves?
"It introduces" --> "The game introduces"
"originally for PlayStation 2" --> "not included in the arcade version". Also, remove the parentheses.
"a robot (Robo-Ky II)" --> "a robot named Robo-Ky II"
Also remove the parentheses in the sentence after that.
"nearly every character's aspect (including buckles and hair)" --> "nearly every aspect of the characters, such as buckles and hair"
"to survival mode" --> "to the survival mode"
"the company said that Guilty Gear Isuka was the game's name.": Ambiguous. Was this said at JAMMA? Did they correct themselves using that statement, or was it simply a new name for the game?
"the Atomiswave arcades" --> "Atomiswave arcade cabinets"
"was noted to sound as good ideas" --> "were considered good ideas in theory"
"it causes a "chaos"" --> "found it to cause "chaos""
"Its new features, poorly executed," --> "The perceived poor execution of its new features"
"other addition" --> "other additions"
"criticized how" --> "he criticized how"
"(from top to down)": Add a colon after it.
"On the side of burst gauge, there is the character's "souls".": "The character's "souls" lie on the side of the burst gauge." Tezero (talk) 01:20, 10 March 2014 (UTC)[reply]

Thank you very much, @Tezero:. I hope I've had corrected all issues you pointed with this edit. What is your verdict? Gabriel Yuji (talk) 01:36, 10 March 2014 (UTC)[reply]

Eh, it's improved, but there are a few new mistakes as a result. I'll just correct it myself later and then pass the article. Tezero (talk) 01:38, 10 March 2014 (UTC)[reply]

Ok. Gabriel Yuji (talk) 01:42, 10 March 2014 (UTC)[reply]