Talk:HMS Essex (1901)/GA1
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Reviewer: Miyagawa (talk · contribs) 12:25, 4 April 2016 (UTC)
Ok, reviewing now. Although I suspect there won't be much as your warship articles are usually of a very high quality, so anything I do find will be inherently nitpicky in nature.
- No duplicate links.
- No DAB links.
- External links are all fine.
- "In 1912 Essex returned home" - could do with a comma, "In 1912, Essex returned home".
- Was there any particular reason she was slower than expected?
- None given by my sources.
- Link Victoriano Huerta
- "The Mexicans resisted and stray bullets hit Essex, wounding one man the next day who was shot in both feet." - Could you flip around the arguments there, as it makes it sounds like the Mexicans resisted and bullets hit the ship... which then wounded a man the following day. I take it the Mexicans resisted, which then the following day the bullets hit the ship and someone was wounded?
- Good idea.
- I'd say to link Prince Arthur, Duke of Connaught and Strathearn, but then that'd cause an awful long line of linked text, so I can see why you didn't. I would have said to swap it around with the Governor General of Canada, but I think it'd cause it to look like two separate people listed.
- Link Bermuda
- @Sturmvogel 66: That's the lot. Ping me back when you've had a chance to fix those points and I'll come back and promote. Miyagawa (talk) 16:47, 4 April 2016 (UTC)
- Thanks for the review. I've gone ahead and linked Prince Arthur like I meant to as I really don't understand why some people think that a stretch of text in blue rather than black is actually a big deal. I think that I've done everything else that was needed as well.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 19:41, 6 April 2016 (UTC)
@Sturmvogel 66: Will give the 100 points once this passes!♦ Dr. Blofeld 13:12, 6 April 2016 (UTC)