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Reviewer: Brad78 (talk) 14:16, 1 December 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Lead
  • "Educated at Harrow School, he won a Blue at Oxford in 1886 and was then the captain who was instrumental in gaining first-class status and admission to the County Championship for Somerset in 1891." I'd reword this sentence. At first I thought he meant he gained first-class status for Oxford, then I wondered if it was Somerset. To be honest, I'm still not sure which one it is. Probably best to split Oxford University and Somerset into two sentences to remove any chance of having a run-on sentence.
Early life
  • ""first won some little renown in Public School and 'Varsity cricket, but it was not until he joined Somersetshire that he forced himself to a prominent place in County Cricket."" Extremely minor point! Is that quote mark before Varsity supposed to be there? I can't find an end quote for it.
First-class debut
  • "An injury to his hand prevented him from playing all but one match for the university in 1887," Do you know what the injury was and how he came about it?
  • "His appearances for Somerset in 1889 were more successful: a twofold change brought the county increased benefit. Having previously played as part of the middle-order, Hewett switched to opening the innings at the start of the season, and also took on the captaincy. The season brought him three half-centuries: two against Warwickshire, and one against Staffordshire, as well as a number of not out scores." Do you have references for these bits?
County Championship cricket
  • "Hewett's emotions were still raw from this loss when Surrey travelled to Taunton more than two months later, expecting an easy win to secure a consecutive championship." Who was expecting to win? Surrey or Somerset?
Later life
Others
  • No disambig links
  • All external links work
  • Everything is great now. Would be nice to add some more details, like to the injury, his cause of death and family. However, with older players like this, sources are much more limited. A good read, and a delight to have players of a more distant era worked on. Brilliant stuff. Brad78 (talk) 17:40, 1 December 2010 (UTC)[reply]