Talk:Homer the Whopper/GA1

GA Review[edit]

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Hi, I'm Music2611, I'll be conducting this GA review, the article looks quite good at first sight.

Lead

The main image needs Alt text

Added. The Flash ^{talk} 23:26, 19 October 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Why do you put the airdate info here and not in the reception section?

Added and sourced. The Flash ^{talk} 23:26, 19 October 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Quotations should be cited.

Done. The Flash ^{talk} 23:26, 19 October 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Plot

This might be nitpicky, but you seem to overuse the word "fit". Try using "get in shape" once in a while.

Done--Pedro J. ^{the rookie} 00:14, 20 October 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Production

The Seth Rogen image needs Alt text

Added. The Flash ^{talk} 23:26, 19 October 2009 (UTC)[reply]

No further issues here. Great work!

Reception

Again with the date thing.

Added and sourced. The Flash ^{talk} 23:27, 19 October 2009 (UTC)[reply]

There's a mention of a cameo by Matt Groening, there should be mention of it in the production section, as it seems quite notable.

Done. The leftorium 20:43, 20 October 2009 (UTC)[reply]

You jump from past to present tense: "...commented that the first act of the episode is the strongest..." for instance. Please change everything to present tense.

Done (I think). The leftorium 20:43, 20 October 2009 (UTC)[reply]

In the final sentence, change I to [he].

Done. The Flash ^{talk} 23:38, 19 October 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Other issues

Any info regarding Kevin Michael Richardson's appearance as a security guard?

Not that I know of - Lefty or Scorpion might know. The Flash ^{talk} 23:38, 19 October 2009 (UTC)[reply]

The AV refrences covers Richerdsons and Groeing's apperences.--Pedro J. ^{the rookie} 00:22, 20 October 2009 (UTC)[reply]

I ment could you put that in the production section, along with the info you have on Groening's cameo. Something like: "Show creator Matt Groening made a cameo appearance in the episode, appearing (scene he appears in). Keving Michael Richardson voiced a security guard."--Music26/11 09:58, 20 October 2009 (UTC)[reply]

I added Groening's cameo to the production section, but not Richardson's because I couldn't find a source for it. The leftorium 20:43, 20 October 2009 (UTC)[reply]

The AV club covers that one says taht richerdson appered in every episode.--Pedro J. ^{the rookie} 20:50, 20 October 2009 (UTC)[reply]

No, he says "Also, my DVR cut off a lot of the closing credits tonight because it’s stupid, but was Kevin Michael Richardson in all four shows?" That is too vague. The leftorium 20:51, 20 October 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Why does the AV Club ref says The AV Club is published by VanDerWerff?

Wondered that myself - fixed. The Flash ^{talk} 23:27, 19 October 2009 (UTC)[reply]

That's all I'll put this article on hold for a week until the issues have been resolved. I believe the article has some potential for FAC, though it needs some more polishing. Also, feel free to review my FAC "The Revenge", which is currently running very low on reviewers. Cheerio.--Music26/11 21:24, 19 October 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Thank you for the review! :) The leftorium 20:43, 20 October 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Pass this article has passed its GA review. I'll take care of the loose ends later, I have to go right now.--Music26/11 11:30, 21 October 2009 (UTC)[reply]