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Reviewer: FunkMonk (talk · contribs) 00:00, 11 May 2018 (UTC)[reply]

  • Looks interesting, some preliminary comments first. FunkMonk (talk) 00:00, 11 May 2018 (UTC)[reply]
  • The last sentence under taxonomy needs a citation.
 Done Enwebb (talk) 02:39, 15 May 2018 (UTC)[reply]
  • The intro seems too short, it should summarise the entire article.
 Done maybe? I expanded it some, let me know if you think it's sufficient. Enwebb (talk) 03:23, 15 May 2018 (UTC)[reply]
  • The image captions could be more specific, and you don't need to mention the name of the subject. For example, the taxobox image could say its a roosting group, instead of now just saying the name in singular, say and where it was taken.
 Done Enwebb (talk) 02:39, 15 May 2018 (UTC)[reply]
Nice, I think the dates are a bit much, though. FunkMonk (talk) 16:28, 15 May 2018 (UTC)[reply]
 Done Enwebb (talk) 02:30, 18 May 2018 (UTC)[reply]
  • The range map also needs a caption.
 Done Enwebb (talk) 02:39, 15 May 2018 (UTC)[reply]
  • The image under description could say that the animal was mist-netted, as is said in the Commons description, and where it was taken.
 Done Enwebb (talk) 02:39, 15 May 2018 (UTC)[reply]
  • Range/habitat should come before the "Human health applications" section. Human relations section should always be last.
 Done Enwebb (talk) 02:39, 15 May 2018 (UTC)[reply]
  • You could begin each section by spelling out its name rather than just referring to it as "it".
 Done Enwebb (talk) 02:30, 18 May 2018 (UTC)[reply]
  • "described as a new species in 1892" Write the binomial here.
 Done Enwebb (talk) 02:30, 18 May 2018 (UTC)[reply]
  • You could mention the common name of its family, and state specifically what its closest relatives are.
 Done Enwebb (talk) 02:30, 18 May 2018 (UTC)[reply]
  • "more pronounced towards its posterior." Whose, the hair's or the animal's?
 Done Enwebb (talk) 02:30, 18 May 2018 (UTC)[reply]
  • "which it is sympatric" Explain in paranthesis.
 Done Enwebb (talk) 02:30, 18 May 2018 (UTC)[reply]
  • Nose leaf, Honduras, carotenoid and holotype are overlinked.
nose-leaf: I left one link in taxonomy and one link in description  Done
Honduras: Left one link in the lead & one in range & habitat  Done
holotype: removed reference to the holotype in range & habitat per later suggestion.  Done
carotenoid: There's only one hyperlink in description and one in human health. You think that's overlinked? I believe it's quite feasible someone would want to read only parts of the article, so I like the sections to be coherent to stand alone  Not done Enwebb (talk) 02:30, 18 May 2018 (UTC)[reply]
I read over the MOS and see now that duplicate hyperlinks are generally discouraged. I removed duplicate hyperlinks with the exception of Honduras, which has a link in the lead (per MOS:DUPLINK) and one in range and habitat.  Done Enwebb (talk) 07:54, 20 May 2018 (UTC)[reply]
  • Explain tragi/tragus.
 Done Enwebb (talk) 02:30, 18 May 2018 (UTC)[reply]
  • "he holotype was collected near the Coco River in Honduras" I think this should be moved to taxonomy, where part of it is already stated.
 Done Enwebb (talk) 02:30, 18 May 2018 (UTC)[reply]
  • "takes up to several weeks' worth" Is that apostrophe needed? Not sure, there seems to be a lot of discussions about it online.
weeks is plural, therefore it should be the plural possessive as currently written (1) Enwebb (talk) 02:30, 18 May 2018 (UTC)[reply]
  • "only found in six of the roughly 1,300 known species of bat" Only stated in intro, which should not have unique info.
 Done Enwebb (talk) 02:30, 18 May 2018 (UTC)[reply]
  • The intro could be split into two paragraphs.
 Done Enwebb (talk) 02:30, 18 May 2018 (UTC)[reply]
  • The intro could need some more links.
 Done Enwebb (talk) 02:30, 18 May 2018 (UTC)[reply]
  • I'll be away until Monday, which should give you plenty of time to fix this, but if it is fixed within the coming hours, I should be able to pass already.
Thanks for taking the time to give feedback. Let me know if you see anything else that needs to be fixed. Enwebb (talk) 02:30, 18 May 2018 (UTC)[reply]
  • I'm back, and pleased to see the change, so will pass it now. I noticed the original description includes drawings[1], perhaps a single image could be made of this an added? It would certainly be in the public domain due to age. FunkMonk (talk) 13:02, 22 May 2018 (UTC)[reply]
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