Talk:Hurricane Carlotta (2012)/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: 12george1 (talk · contribs) 22:25, 10 January 2013 (UTC)

Hi TheAustinMan, I am going to review another one of your GAN's, if you don't mind.

• "Carlotta developed slowly into a tropical depression from a tropical wave." - When and where was this? Was it on September 1 near Fiji or southwest of Central America on June 14?
• "It moved generally west-northwestward and by the following day" - There should be an indication of the date in the previous sentence if are you going to say "the following day". Shouldn't be a problem when the previous issue is fixed.
• "Rapid intensification ensued further, as Carlotta peaked as a 110 mph (175 km/h) Category 2 hurricane on the same day prior to making landfall, eventually becoming the easternmost landfalling Pacific hurricane in recorded history." - This is sort of a run-on sentence. Crammed into one sentence is RI, peak intensity, landfall, and a landfall record. Maybe it should be something like this: "Rapid intensification ensued further, as Carlotta peaked as a 110 mph (175 km/h) Category 2 hurricane on June 15. At 0100 UTC on the following day, Carlotta made landfall near Puerto Escondido, Mexico, at the same intensity".
• Only two lines of impact in the lead? What about like the 29,000 homes and 2,500 businesses damaged and/or the peak rainfall total?
• Use this webpage here to prove that your conversions from Mexican Pesos to U.S. Dollars are correct or else it might be considered OR.
• "On June 12, a tropical disturbance developed off the west coast of Costa Rica, moving westward and entering the eastern Pacific after crossing Panama." - Might be better to say "On June 12, a tropical disturbance developed off the west coast of Costa Rica, moved westward and entered the eastern Pacific after crossing Panama."
• "the depression was located in an area of low wind shear and warm sea surface temperatures, which were favorable for intensification." - Low wind shear and warm SST's are already favorable conditions. Why not instead say "the depression was located in an area of low wind shear and warm sea surface temperatures [insert either comma or & ndash;] conditions that are considered favorable for intensification."
• "When the system was first classified as a tropical cyclone, the government of Mexico issued hurricane watch and a tropical storm watch for a portion of the Mexican Coast" - Hmm, which part of the "Mexican Coast"? Cozumel? Baja California? Matamoros?
• "Later that day, the watch was upgraded into a hurricane warning." - Again, you cannot say "that day" or "the following day" if the date is not mentioned in the previous sentence.
• There is a bit of an inconsistency with the names of the authors in the reference. For example, on Reference #2 there is "Todd Kimberlain", but "Berg, Robbie" on Reference #16.

• Thank you for your quick response. I will now list this as a Good Article.--12george1 (talk) 01:01, 11 January 2013 (UTC)