Talk:Hurricane Hilary (1993)/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: The Bushranger (talk · contribs) 01:29, 29 December 2011 (UTC)[reply]

The following issues in the text need to be addressed before this can be passed for GA:

"Hurricane Hillary was a Category 3 hurricane..." Might want to clarify "East Pacific"/"Pacific Ocean" or something, as the reader could presume it was an Atlantic hurricane otherwise.
- Meh, added. Y E ^Pacific ^Hurricane 16:37, 29 December 2011 (UTC)[reply]
"Nearly stalled as it underwent a Fujiwhara interaction..." Would suggest just "as it interacted with" and move the Fujiwhara comment and link to "Meteorological History", to tighten and simplify the lede a bit. The fact it intereacted is sufficent for the lede, I think; how it interacted can be explained in more detail later.
- Done. Y E ^Pacific ^Hurricane 16:37, 29 December 2011 (UTC)[reply]
The line about watches and warnings is slightly confusing. The threat ended? Then started again? Suggest similifying this a bit.
- Yea, it ended, but started again, but explained that further via a wikilink to. Y E ^Pacific ^Hurricane 16:37, 29 December 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Should wikilink convection and tropical wave.
- Done. Y E ^Pacific ^Hurricane 16:37, 29 December 2011 (UTC)[reply]
"the depression intensified into..." suggest "the depression intensified, becoming..."
- Incorporated. Y E ^Pacific ^Hurricane 16:37, 29 December 2011 (UTC)[reply]
"atmospheric circulation..." does this mean Low-level Circulation Center? I'd assume the circulation would be fairly easy to find, but pinning down the center might be difficult.
- Yea, change the wording. Y E ^Pacific ^Hurricane 16:37, 29 December 2011 (UTC)[reply]
"meteorolgists remarked the possibility of making landfall..." Bit of a grammar issue here. Perhaps "meterologists suggested there was a possibility the storm might make landfall..."
- Done. Y E ^Pacific ^Hurricane 16:37, 29 December 2011 (UTC)[reply]
"downgraded into a tropical storm..." suggeest "downgraded to a tropical storm..."
- Ok. Y E ^Pacific ^Hurricane 16:37, 29 December 2011 (UTC)[reply]
"while most of the mid to upper level moisture..." suggest adding "associated with the storm" immediately after this.
- Done. Y E ^Pacific ^Hurricane 16:37, 29 December 2011 (UTC)[reply]

"further advisories were issued..." What sort of advisories?
- Watches and warnings.
"Heavy rains, peaking at..." suggest "Heavy rains, with a maximum recorded amount of..."
- Done. Y E ^Pacific ^Hurricane 16:37, 29 December 2011 (UTC)[reply]
"Baja California Peninsula", shouldn't that be a lowercase P?
- No, it is a proper known (a type of peninsula). Y E ^Pacific ^Hurricane 16:37, 29 December 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Pictures are all appropriately licensed;
References are from reliable sources and are inline appropriately, meets WP:V, WP:RS, WP:NOR;
Appears to be free of copyvio/paraphasing/plagarism concerns
Covers the topic well without going off on tangents;
Is neutral and stable;
MOS adhered to.

I'm putting this On hold until the grammar/text issues above are resolved. - The Bushranger _{One ping only} 01:29, 29 December 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Nice work. I'm calling this a ✓ Pass. - The Bushranger _{One ping only} 00:46, 30 December 2011 (UTC)[reply]