Talk:Hurricane Ignacio (1985)/GA1

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Reviewer: TheAustinMan (talk · contribs) 15:58, 3 March 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Lead

Infobox says 130 mph. Did you mean 135?
- No. Y E ^Pacific ^Hurricane 16:22, 3 March 2013 (UTC)[reply]
You could link 'rapidly intensified' to rapid deepening.
- Done. Y E ^Pacific ^Hurricane 16:22, 3 March 2013 (UTC)[reply]
If you say "As fast as it strengthened," you don't have to say it weakened just as rapidly, because you already state that.
- Re-wroded. Y E ^Pacific ^Hurricane 16:22, 3 March 2013 (UTC)[reply]
"Ignacio was downgraded into a tropical storm while passing south of Hawaii." When?
- Added. Y E ^Pacific ^Hurricane 16:22, 3 March 2013 (UTC)[reply]
"...however, the watch was dropped when Ignacio weakened. However, Ignacio still brought high waves and light rainfall to the islands." You use however twice. You should find an alternative if possible.
- Better? Y E ^Pacific ^Hurricane 16:22, 3 March 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Meteorological history

"on July 21 1,623 mi (2,612 km)" I think you should add a comma after 21.
- No, but there should be a while located in here, which I added. Y E ^Pacific ^Hurricane 16:22, 3 March 2013 (UTC)[reply]
"Intensifying further west than normal[2]" comma before reference.
- { Done. Y E ^Pacific ^Hurricane 16:22, 3 March 2013 (UTC)[reply]
"Based on this, the CPHC upgraded Ignacio into hurricane status..." I think into → to
- Done. Y E ^Pacific ^Hurricane 16:22, 3 March 2013 (UTC)[reply]
"Continuing to rapidly intensify, Hurricane Ignacio moved west-northwest at 10 mph (16 km/h). Ignacio was upgraded into Category 2 status on the Saffir-Simpson Hurricane Scale (SSHS)." I think you could combine the two sentences, and state when Ignacio was upgraded.
- Done. Y E ^Pacific ^Hurricane 16:22, 3 March 2013 (UTC)[reply]
Link Hurricane Hunter
- I did already :P Y E ^Pacific ^Hurricane 16:22, 3 March 2013 (UTC)[reply]
"The hurricane held peak intensity for several hours, however, an upper trough northwest of the Hawaiian Islands was gradually approaching Ignacio." If you're starting a new paragraph, a good rule of thumb is to include the time the stated fact happened, regardless of whether or not it was stated at the end of the last.
- CPHC did not say. Y E ^Pacific ^Hurricane 16:22, 3 March 2013 (UTC)[reply]
"a mjaor hurricane" spellcheck
- Done. Y E ^Pacific ^Hurricane 16:22, 3 March 2013 (UTC)[reply]
"Air Force aircraft" Whose Air Force?
- Idk. Y E ^Pacific ^Hurricane 16:22, 3 March 2013 (UTC)[reply]
"The hurricane resumed its westerly course..." I don't see anywhere else in the MH where a different course was taken or disrupted.
- If you look at the track map, it did turn WNW for a while. Y E ^Pacific ^Hurricane 16:22, 3 March 2013 (UTC)[reply]

I know but that's just the image. You should state it in the actual prose. TheAustinMan^{(Talk·Works)} 16:27, 3 March 2013 (UTC)[reply]
- I did, " Hurricane Ignacio moved west-northwest ". Y E ^Pacific ^Hurricane 16:30, 3 March 2013 (UTC)[reply]

"While passing south of the island chain..." Since this is in a new paragraph, what island chain?
- Substituted. Y E ^Pacific ^Hurricane 16:22, 3 March 2013 (UTC)[reply]
Can you provide any times for the events stated in the MH?
- Added a couple. Y E ^Pacific ^Hurricane 16:22, 3 March 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Preparations and impact

"was lcoated northwest..." Spellcheck.
- Done. Y E ^Pacific ^Hurricane 16:22, 3 March 2013 (UTC)[reply]
"... track then what..." then → than
- Done. Y E ^Pacific ^Hurricane 16:22, 3 March 2013 (UTC)[reply]
"Bu July 24..." Bu → By
- Done. Y E ^Pacific ^Hurricane 16:22, 3 March 2013 (UTC)[reply]
I suggest linking high surf advisory to severe weather terminology (United States)#Coastal/Lakeshore Hazards but that's just my opinion.
"Big Island of Hawaii[2]" Needs period.
- Done. Y E ^Pacific ^Hurricane 16:22, 3 March 2013 (UTC)[reply]
"the watch was cancelled as Ignacio resumed weakening..." Did it weaken beforehand? Because you use Igancio, and to me it appears Ignacio strengthened and weakened, with not much in between.
- Read the MH part where it mention slight re-intensification may have occurred. Y E ^Pacific ^Hurricane 16:22, 3 March 2013 (UTC)[reply]

I know, but that was just a 'theory' and its not supported by the database. TheAustinMan^{(Talk·Works)} 16:27, 3 March 2013 (UTC)[reply]
- HURDAT does say it leveled off in intensity. Y E ^Pacific ^Hurricane 16:30, 3 March 2013 (UTC)[reply]

"and the Big Island" I don't think you need 'the'
- It IMO does not make sense without it. Y E ^Pacific ^Hurricane 16:22, 3 March 2013 (UTC)[reply]
"that lead to the beaches" lead → led
- Done. Y E ^Pacific ^Hurricane 16:22, 3 March 2013 (UTC)[reply]

References and external links

Would Reference #9 have any link?
- It's in cite news, so they don't need links! But, I made the title lowercase. Y E ^Pacific ^Hurricane 16:22, 3 March 2013 (UTC)[reply]

That's all I have for now. TheAustinMan^{(Talk·Works)} 15:58, 3 March 2013 (UTC)[reply]