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Reviewer: TropicalAnalystwx13 (talk · contribs) 02:53, 30 December 2014 (UTC)[reply]

  • "Assuming a westerly course that it would maintain throughout its existence..." - Nitpicking here, but Iselle's track shows a WNW motion, not a W motion.
  • "Thereafter, Iselle encountered hostile environmental conditions which caused the storm to quickly weaken before making landfall on the Big Island on August 7 as a tropical storm of moderate intensity" - This sentence feels like it drags; maybe a reword or split?
  • "At 21:00 UTC on July 31, the NHC classified the disturbance as Tropical Storm Iselle due to the system's organization and the detection tropical storm-force winds by the MetOp-B scatterometer." - Need an "of" after detection.
  • "Due to the loss of any sustained thunderstorm activity at the storm's center, the CPHC decided to downgrade Iselle to a remnant area of low pressure on August 9;[26] at the time the disturbance was centered roughly 200 mi (320 km) west-southwest of Honolulu." - Need a comma after "time".
  • "Heavy rains affected most of the southern islands, with some areas of the Big Island seeing more than 12 in (300 mm) due to orographic lift from the southerly flow on the backside of Iselle." - Link orographic lift.
  • "The greatest total was at the Kulani National Wildlife Refuge where 15.25 in (387 mm) was observed." - Comma after Refuge
  • "Further north on Oahu, totals peaked at 4.22 in (107 mm) while Molaki and Lanai received generally negligible totals." - Also comma before while.
  • "Only one known death took place as a direct result of the storm; a 19-year old woman who was swept away by flood waters while hiking in a closed state park." - A colon or comma would be better suited here.
  • "Over 250 property owners reported damage, with at least 11 houses destroyed, Public damage and the cost to remove debris was estimated at $13.2 million. and 28 with major damage." - Seems like you had a case of mouse-jumping.
  • "Due to the threat from Iselle, lieutenant governor candidate Warner Sutton requested that governor Neil Abercrombie postpone the August 9 primary." - Governor Neil Abercrombie (capitalization).
  • "After a close campaign between incumbent senator Brian Schatz and congresswoman Colleen Hanabusa" - These should also be capitalized (senator and congresswoman).
  • "Due to the damage, congresswoman Tulsi Gabbard remarked..." - Capitalize congresswoman. Always capitalize a formal name.
  • "However, agriculture secretary Tom Vilsack declared an agriculture disaster..." - Capitalize.
  • "When Iselle made landfall on the Big Island as a strong tropical storm, it became the strongest tropical cyclone on record to hit the island; and one of only two storms to hit the island at tropical storm intensity or higher." - Semicolon isn't necessary
  • "With estimated damage cost of $66 million (2014 USD), Iselle surpassed Hurricane Dot in 1959 as the third-costliest tropical cyclone to ever hit the U.S. state of Hawaii; even after accounting for inflation." - Semicolon to comma
  • "In addition, Iselle was the third-strongest tropical cyclone to ever make landfall on the Hawaiian islands after Hurricanes Dot and Iniki." - Hurricanes shouldn't be capitalized
  • References 39, 50, 51, 55, 75 are broken; reference 62 redirects to the main site

I'll be happy to pass once the minor issues above have been addressed. TropicalAnalystwx13 (talk) 02:53, 30 December 2014 (UTC)[reply]

Sorry for the long wait, I was on vacation, but it should be good now! ♫ Hurricanehink (talk) 17:31, 13 January 2015 (UTC)[reply]
Passing. :) TropicalAnalystwx13 (talk) 21:40, 13 January 2015 (UTC)[reply]