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Reviewer: 12george1 (talk · contribs) 21:35, 9 March 2014 (UTC)[reply]

Hello User:Hurricanehink! Secret decided to delete this page so that way I could review Juan instead. Anyway, here is some issues I have with this article. I am going out for dinner tonight, so I will finish later. --12george1 (talk) 21:35, 9 March 2014 (UTC)[reply]

" that looped twice near the Louisiana coast, causing torrential flooding for several days." - I know there can be torrential rainfall, but can there be torrential flooding?

Sure! But I'll change it. ♫ Hurricanehink (talk) 01:35, 10 March 2014 (UTC)[reply]

"The energy from Juan helped spawn an occluded low in the Tennessee Valley, which produced " - Wikilink Tennessee Valley

Sure! ♫ Hurricanehink (talk) 01:35, 10 March 2014 (UTC)[reply]

I know there is an article for the 1985 Election day floods, but could you add more information to the Inland and Mid-Atlantic section? Judging by the current size of the section, it doesn't look like the flood was very severe, other than the damage and death toll.

Well, Juan didn't cause that flooding. It just preceded it, like Hurricane Connie before Hurricane Diane. So I don't want to include too much info, as the focus of Juan should be more on the gulf coast. ♫ Hurricanehink (talk) 01:35, 10 March 2014 (UTC)[reply]

Alright then. I am going to let you keep the Inland and Mid-Atlantic section as it is.--12george1 (talk) 03:01, 10 March 2014 (UTC)[reply]

"On October 29, Louisiana Governor Edwin Edwards requested that the state's congressional delegation ask President Ronald Reagan for a disaster declaration." - I noticed toward the end that you wikilinked Ronald Reagan. So I think maybe you should wikilink Edwin Edwards, too. Wouldn't you like others to know about what an interesting person Edwards is? :P

I linked him in preps, should I link him again? ;) ♫ Hurricanehink (talk) 01:35, 10 March 2014 (UTC)[reply]

Never mind. I wasn't paying attention. Just scratch that.--12george1 (talk) 02:59, 10 March 2014 (UTC)[reply]

More

"Juan moved erratically at first, eventually tracking more steadily to the north-northeast on October 27.[2]" - Maybe you should add a "but" in there, so that there is more of a contrast between Juan's initial erratic movement and then steady path.

It was never that steady though, given its later looping near Louisiana. It just became less erratic. I think the usage of "more steadily" confirms the steadier path. ♫ Hurricanehink (talk) 05:21, 11 March 2014 (UTC)[reply]

"On October 31, the storm moved across the Mississippi Delta near Burrwood and accelerated to the northeast,[4][3] influenced by an approaching upper-level trough." - Since this is a new paragraph, you should mention what state Burrwood is in.

Agreed. Originally it wasn't the start of a paragraph, so I changed it. ♫ Hurricanehink (talk) 05:21, 11 March 2014 (UTC)[reply]

"just west of Pensacola, Florida with winds of 65 km/h (100 km/h) late on October 31." - Hmm, that's an interesting conversion :P

Uhh, you see, it was before mph was... err, yea, I'll just change it instead of coming up with a snappy response :P ♫ Hurricanehink (talk) 05:21, 11 March 2014 (UTC)[reply]

"ceased tracking the circulation at 1800 UTC that day" - Wikilink to atmospheric circulation

Why? The article doesn't seem that relevant, since it's mostly talking about large-scale circulations like the polar vortex. ♫ Hurricanehink (talk) 05:21, 11 March 2014 (UTC)[reply]

Any preparations for Mississippi?

It was never really much of a threat, given it's tucked in the corner. I didn't find any in my research, other than it being affected by the gale warnings. ♫ Hurricanehink (talk) 05:21, 11 March 2014 (UTC)[reply]

"it dropped over 10 in (250 mm) across much of the southern portion of the state." - 10 inches of what? Sulfuric acid? :P

Gumbo, actually. ♫ Hurricanehink (talk) 05:21, 11 March 2014 (UTC)[reply]

Ok, that's it for now. I will be happy to pass this article when these issues are fixed.--12george1 (talk) 02:59, 10 March 2014 (UTC)[reply]

Yay! Better? ♫ Hurricanehink (talk) 05:21, 11 March 2014 (UTC)[reply]

Nice job Hurricanehink. I am now going to pass this article. Regards, --12george1 (talk) 21:39, 11 March 2014 (UTC)[reply]