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GA Review[edit]

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Reviewer: 12george1 (talk · contribs) 17:51, 6 October 2011 (UTC)[reply]

  • The lead should have more impact details, IMO. It is rather vague just saying that there was flooding.
  • "October 5 based on daty from ship reports." - typo
  • "The storms began to intensify rapidly." - Storms? You mean "storm"?
  • "Tropical Storm then began to turn to the north" - Switch to either "The tropical storm" or replace the first two words with Waldo.
  • "Meanwhile, Hurricane Waldo reached it's" - That should probably just be "its"
    • Why do always make this mistake???????? 23:29, 6 October 2011 (UTC)
  • "The peak rainfall total in Mexico from Waldo was 9.61 inches (244 mm) in Jocuixtita/San Igancio, though heavy rain was also recorded along southern Baja California Sur." - The second part isn't really contradictory. So I would remove the word "though" and replace the comma with a semicolon.
  • "While no deaths or injuries were reported[5] much farmland and 600 houses were destroyed." - I would add a comma after "reported".
  • "One motorist was stranded for 30 minuets before" - typo
  • "The Sedgwick County, the county fire department freed 35 trapped people from rising flood waters," - Change to "In Sedgwick County"
  • "In all, Waldo's rain were comparable to Atlantic" - Change to "Waldo's rains were"
  • Reference #1 has the wrong title. In addition, you should change "Gunther; Cross" to "E.B. Gunther and R.L. Cross"
  • Reference #4 is a deadlink since its from thehurricanearchive.com. Also, the date should be change to "10-10-1985" so that it is consistent with the other references.
  • The author of References #8, #10, and #11 should be the Associated Press.