Talk:Ian Hummer/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Wizardman (talk · contribs) 17:41, 16 May 2013 (UTC)

I'll review this article shortly. Wizardman 17:41, 16 May 2013 (UTC)

Here are the issues I found:

• The last PDF reference is a deadlink.
  • fixed.--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 05:43, 18 May 2013 (UTC)
• "He has helped lead the team to three postseason tournaments " modify tense (He led the team..)
  • Done.--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 04:53, 18 May 2013 (UTC)
• "During his campus visit with his father at his brother Alex' (Princeton Class of 2011) dorm room, he decided at midnight to go hang out at Dan Mavraides room across campus," Alex's
  • O.K.--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 04:57, 18 May 2013 (UTC)
• "Due to his relationship with former Princeton and current Georgetown Hoyas men's basketball head coach John Thompson III, " whose? If you mean Hummer's, could that be clarified or built on?
  • I assume you were questioning whether it was Mavraides or Hummer. I changed his to Hummer's.--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 05:01, 18 May 2013 (UTC)
• The senior season is a rather large block of text and should be split into paragraphs.
  • Done.--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 05:12, 18 May 2013 (UTC)
• "ON February 22," On
  • Done.--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 05:12, 18 May 2013 (UTC)
• "class of 1967 and former high school All-American." and a
  • Fixed.--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 05:13, 18 May 2013 (UTC)

Article on hold, will pass when fixed. Wizardman 17:04, 17 May 2013 (UTC)

Looks good, article passes. Wizardman 17:46, 18 May 2013 (UTC)