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GA Review

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Reviewer: Winner 42 (talk · contribs) 21:18, 3 August 2015 (UTC)[reply]


Overall Comments

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Placing under review, should be done within a few days. Winner 42 Talk to me! 21:18, 3 August 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Thank you in advance. Gug01 (talk) 18:40, 4 August 2015 (UTC)[reply]
No problem, overall this article is quite compellingly written and highly comprehensive, but there are some minor issues listed below. I would appreciate it if you would leave comments and marks next to each point made so I can keep track., thanks.
All major issues have been addressed, passing GA review. Winner 42 Talk to me! 18:53, 18 August 2015 (UTC)[reply]
  • No dead or dab links, nice job
  • Oxford comma usage is inconsistent

Sectional Analysis

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  • Lead
    • A native of Transylvania, he graduated from Budapest University, following which he was ordained This is awkwardly worded.
    • the Apuseni Mountains, which form -> the Apuseni Mountains which formed
    • his work disputed between the rival schools of Sămănătorul and Poporanism Please clarify the meaning of this clause.
      • It means that his work was disputed between the rival schools of Sămănătorul and Poporanism: that thy both claim him as their own. Dahn (talk) 18:54, 7 August 2015 (UTC)[reply]
        • Ok, you might want to consider adding a "was"/"is" to that clause then.
    • Committed to social and cultural activism in Transylvania Activism for what? Also "committed" seems less than neutral as it endorses his activism.
      • No, I beg to differ. Committed means that he was dedicated to accomplishing his goals, whatever they were: using "committed to a life of crime" doesn't mean I endorse said crimes. His activism was of many kinds, as the article goes on to specify: social, cultural, political, eugenical aso. Dahn (talk) 18:54, 7 August 2015 (UTC)[reply]
    • with a break during World War I that eventually took him deep into Ukraine What did he do that is important in Ukraine?
    • 1919, and would live there for much of the remainder of his life -> 1919, where he lived for most of the remainder of his life (Not set on this particular change, feel free to clarify the wording in another way)
    • After the war, he involved himself in both the political and cultural life of Greater Romania, being voted into the Romanian Academy, and assuming the office of Senate vice president under the National Renaissance Front dictatorship. Run on sentence with poor grammar.
  • Early Life
    • while he believed his great-grandparents were cowherds Where they actually, or did he just think that?
    • idyllic childhood is this a quote?
    • According to the writer Who?/Of what? Is this WP:OR?
    • Literary historians describe this at the period of his literary debut, which was a collaboration with Unirea. Two issues here, who are these historians and the sentence's meaning is somewhat ambiguous. For example, when is the period and who/what is Unirea?
      • All of those who were consulted: Straje and Opriș, independently, in this case:if you look through the rest of the paragrpah, you will note how the clause is detailed and further claims in with the two sources differ are attributed. Dahn (talk) 18:54, 7 August 2015 (UTC)[reply]
    • published there Where?
    • which was at the time -> which was
    • the Cluj-based newspaper -> a Cluj-based newspaper? Was it the only one?
    • with pieces he signed Alfius, and later as Agarbi or Potcoavă ("Horseshoe") Please clarify this as it is confusing.
  • Priesthood and World War I
  • 1920s
  • Maturity
    • he became canon Could use an article.
    • Agârbiceanu withdrew from politics Considering that he seems to continue involvement in politics after this, could you clarify what is meant?
  • Under communism
    • then returning -> before returning
    • these found his reputation as a writer valuable for their own interests, and preferred -> they found his reputation as a writer valuable for their own interests, and they preferred
    • The sentence beginning with Granted the Order of Labor runs on
    • and was -> and he was
  • Literary contribution
    • This section appears balanced, but due to my personal lack of subject knowledge and the difficulty of analyzing this article's sources, I will be requesting an informal 2nd opinion at Wikipedia talk:WikiProject Romania to look at the neutrality of this section
  • Ideology and style
    • What is a Transylvanian nawab? Many readers will likely be unfamiliar with the term.
    • and always a marginal among -> and he was always a marginal among
  • Major works
  • Legacy
    • Not seeing any issues here, nice job

Review

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GA review – see WP:WIAGA for criteria

  1. Is it reasonably well written?
    A. Prose is "clear and concise", without copyvios, or spelling and grammar errors:
    B. MoS compliance for lead, layout, words to watch, fiction, and lists:
  2. Is it factually accurate and verifiable?
    A. Has an appropriate reference section:
    B. Cites reliable sources, where necessary:
    C. No original research:
  3. Is it broad in its coverage?
    A. Major aspects:
    B. Focused (see summary style):
  4. Is it neutral?
    Fair representation without bias:
  5. Is it stable?
    No edit wars, etc:
  6. Does it contain images to illustrate the topic?
    A. Images are tagged with their copyright status, and valid fair use rationales are provided for non-free content:
    B. Images are provided if possible and are relevant to the topic, and have suitable captions:
  7. Overall:
    Pass or Fail: