Talk:Is This the Life We Really Want?/GA1

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Reviewer: MarioSoulTruthFan (talk · contribs) 18:53, 2 September 2019 (UTC)[reply]

This lead is terrible it adresses next no nothing but the singles and the theme section. Should be a summary of the article, it doesn't adress the critical reception and only two of the charts.
Needs to be fully re-worked.

pared-back → meaning?
"encourage him, to push him a little bit. He encouraged" → avoid repetition of vocabulary
"Godrich used tape loops and found sounds extensively to make the album's segues." → needs more explanation due to the technical vocabulary, making it easier for those who are not inside the industry

"The album peaked at number 3 in the United Kingdom and number 11 in the United States." → source
"It produced four singles: "Smell the Roses", "Déjà Vu", "The Last Refugee", and "Wait for Her"." → same as previous, release dates for instance
If I were you I would create a commercial performance section with the charts peaks, weeks and certifications, and a background section where you can add the rest.
Very poor

"The music is quintessential post-Dark Side Of The Moon Floyd, but channeled by offspring: producer Nigel Godrich brings prog-rock grandeur, multi-instrumentalist Jonathan Wilson microdose psychedelia, Lucius alt-R&B backing vocals." → use your own words more often
Drowned in Sound, Consequence of Sound and Pitchfork reviews → same as previous, just straight copy and paste.
Missing several reviews that could be added from the boxscore, very incomplete and poor.

"All tracks written by Roger Waters, except "Wait for Her", written by Waters & Mahmoud Darwish." → use album liner notes as a source

No authors in several articles that have so such as Rolling Stone, Spin, Fact Magazine, among others
Missing several dates, access dates, works/websites, over and under linking
chicagotribune.com → Chicago Tribune
pitchfork.com → Pitchfork

How about adding a release history and commercial performance?
High copy past, according to Earwig's from Rolling Stone, for example.
The article is far from meeting the criteria as it doesn't comply with the manual of style guidelines, the references are not formatted according to the layout style guideline, it contains copyright violations and finally, it is not broad in its coverage. This article shouldn't even be nominated in the first place. Failing it. MarioSoulTruthFan (talk) 12:17, 3 September 2019 (UTC)[reply]