Talk:Italian cruiser Gorizia/GA1
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Reviewer: Biblioworm (talk · contribs) 01:15, 8 August 2016 (UTC)
A few minor comments:
The Spanish commander refused and instead steamed to Bizerte in French Tunisia...
- Perhaps it should be made clear what the commander refused to do- A good idea
At Italy's entrance into the Second World War on 10 June 1940...
- "At" -> "Upon"- Done
Torpedo bombers from HMS Eagle attacked Gorizia and the other heavy cruisers but they failed to score any hits.
- Comma between "cruisers" and "but"- Good catch
On the 28th, she left Messina for Taranto, though Allied aircraft continued to attack Gorizia there from 8 to 11 June, though she remained unscathed.
- Change comma (between "Taranto" and "though) to semi-colon- Done
Ten days later, the 3rd Division was disbanded, since the two surviving Italian heavy cruisers were out of action—Bolzano having been torpedoed and badly damaged by a British submarine in August 1942.
- Change em-dash to comma- Fixed.
Everything else looks fine to me.
@Parsecboy: The review has been completed. Biblio (talk) Reform project. 02:28, 8 August 2016 (UTC)