Talk:Izak catshark/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: J Milburn (talk • contribs • count) 20:53, 7 September 2011 (UTC)

Hope you don't mind me taking on this one, too- just to reiterate, you're completely welcome to ask me to take a step back if you feel an article would benefit from a review from someone else. J Milburn (talk) 20:54, 7 September 2011 (UTC)

• "of catshark, family Scyliorhinidae," If you're looking to imply that "catshark" and "Scyliorhinidae" are synonymous, which is what our article implies, perhaps brackets/parenthesis would be the way to go, the same as with "The Izak catshark (or simply Izak, Holohalaelurus regani)"
  • Maybe, though I prefer the commas as I think having multiple parentheses in the first line looks bad.
    • Perhaps then a link to Scyliorhinidae in the lead? J Milburn (talk) 15:59, 10 September 2011 (UTC)
      • Added.
• "The Izak catshark is not utilized by humans. It is regularly caught incidentally by a bottom trawl commercial fishery within its range, but despite the fishing pressure its population has been increasing." I think this could read a little better
  • Rearranged the sentences
• "off the west coast, in areas with a wider continental shelf." Both the areas listed? Or are they the same thing? It's not clear right now.
  • Rearranged it to make it clearer
• "This species often has nematode and/or flatworm parasites in its stomach." I'm not sure "and/or" is great writing
  • Changed to "and"s, which I feel is semantically less precise but such is style.
• "(see below)" Avoid self references
  • Removed
• "and/or" Again
• "Nevertheless, it merits continued population monitoring because of its highly restricted range." This is something of a judgement rather than a fact; could it perhaps be attributed in the prose?
  • Merged with previous sentence to attribute to the IUCN
• "Froese, Rainer, and Daniel Pauly, eds." These names are given in a different way to others.
  • That's a function of the FishBase template; I can replace it manually if it's a sticky issue
    • Consistency would be good. J Milburn (talk) 15:59, 10 September 2011 (UTC)
      • OK, replaced with manual version.
• What does "Izak" mean?
  • Don't have any info on this, other than it's apparently a proper noun of some sort

I've added some categories and made some small edits, but, for the most part, this one's looking about right. I'm also going to take a look through some sources to see if there's anything you've missed/any other sources that should be included. J Milburn (talk) 21:27, 7 September 2011 (UTC)

Let me know of further issues. -- Yzx (talk) 03:53, 9 September 2011 (UTC)

The article's looking very nice. A search around threw up nothing of note that wasn't in the article. Ticks all the boxes, I'm promoting now- Good work! J Milburn (talk) 21:53, 11 September 2011 (UTC)

Thanks for the review. -- Yzx (talk) 23:23, 11 September 2011 (UTC)