Talk:J. Hunter Guthrie/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: The Rambling Man (talk · contribs) 18:17, 24 February 2020 (UTC)[reply]

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"he taught at Saint Joseph's College" there are literally thousands of places with this name, I'd be more precise.
- Clarified. Ergo Sum 04:39, 29 February 2020 (UTC)[reply]
"in Wernersville, Pennsylvania in" comma after Pen.
- Done. Ergo Sum 04:39, 29 February 2020 (UTC)[reply]
"January 8, 1901 in New York City" comma after 1901.
- Done. Ergo Sum 04:40, 29 February 2020 (UTC)[reply]
"Guthrie was born" usually okay to repeat full name on the first instance in the bio, especially when you're dealing with his family who are all "Guthrie"s.....
- Good point. Ergo Sum 04:40, 29 February 2020 (UTC)[reply]
"through China, Japan, North Africa, and India on" just watch out for linking common geographical places...
- Removed links. Ergo Sum 04:44, 29 February 2020 (UTC)[reply]
"Bishop of El Paso" given this took place in Paris, probably worth making sure our readers know that this El Paso was in Texas...
- Clarified. Ergo Sum 04:41, 29 February 2020 (UTC)[reply]
"During this time, he became ill with tuberculosis, which required that he be treated in Asheville, North Carolina." Why? From where, all of those places? That must have been logistically difficult?
- My thoughts exactly. I wish I had an answer, but the source only says that that's where he had to go. Ergo Sum 04:42, 29 February 2020 (UTC)[reply]
I imagine "think tank" would be more linkable than say "democratic". Some choices needed on how useful many of your links are here.
- Linked think tank. Ergo Sum 04:43, 29 February 2020 (UTC)[reply]
" to do fundraising" -> " to fundraise".
- Done. Ergo Sum 04:44, 29 February 2020 (UTC)[reply]
" and mysteriously did not" this is not encyclopedic.
- Was trying to convey that it was a mystery to those on campus. I've removed it. Ergo Sum 04:45, 29 February 2020 (UTC)[reply]
" in Baltimore, Maryland and " comma after Maryland.
- Done. Ergo Sum 04:46, 29 February 2020 (UTC)[reply]
"He offered multiple reasons for his decision. He believed that ..." merge.
- Done. Ergo Sum 04:46, 29 February 2020 (UTC)[reply]
Could link college football for our non-US readers.
- Done. Ergo Sum 04:47, 29 February 2020 (UTC)[reply]
No need to link things like "lungs".
- Removed. Ergo Sum 04:47, 29 February 2020 (UTC)[reply]
"in1960.[1]" space.
- Fixed. Ergo Sum 04:48, 29 February 2020 (UTC)[reply]
"Guthried assumed " minus d.
- Fixed. Ergo Sum 04:48, 29 February 2020 (UTC)[reply]
"Guthrie died on November 11, 1974 at the Jesuit " don't quickly repeat his name, and comma after 1974.
- Done. Ergo Sum 04:49, 29 February 2020 (UTC)[reply]
Ref 19 pp.
- Done. Ergo Sum 04:50, 29 February 2020 (UTC)[reply]
Same for ref 21.
- Done. Ergo Sum 04:50, 29 February 2020 (UTC)[reply]

That's it. Sorry for the delay. The Rambling Man (Staying alive since 2005!) 20:59, 28 February 2020 (UTC)[reply]

@The Rambling Man: Thanks for the review. Apologies for this one being a little messy. Ergo Sum 04:50, 29 February 2020 (UTC)[reply]

No need for apologies. Always a pleasure to review your work. And very happy with the changes here, so happy to promote. The Rambling Man (Staying alive since 2005!) 18:09, 2 March 2020 (UTC)[reply]

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