Talk:James White (inventor)/GA1

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Nominator: Generalissima (talk · contribs) 02:01, 30 April 2024 (UTC)

Reviewer: Sohom Datta (talk · contribs) 14:52, 22 June 2024 (UTC)

This has been around in the backlog long enough, I'll take a stab at this. Sohom (talk) 14:52, 22 June 2024 (UTC)

Review

• 600 subscribers -- I don't think subscribers is the right term here.
  • Source uses it but yeah it doesn't seem right. Used customers instead. -G
• although it is unknown if White was aware of its separate invention by clockmakers, first attested by Joseph Williamson c. 1720. -- This is a bit hard to parse, what does first attested by mean in the context?
  • Good point, rephrased a bit. - G
• bolstered by cross-Channel transmission -- cross-channel?
  • Capitalisation is correct when referring specifically to the English Channel. - G
• possibly indicating his acquaintanceship -- Why possibly?
  • Source sorta hedges its bets without fully committing. I think this is because he never actually mentioned the Earl Stanhope until later in life. - G
• possibly indicating that his parents were Nonconformists. -- Is this backed up by the source, feels like a bit of a stretch to assume this?
  • The source makes this claim directly; "No record [of his birth] is found in the Church Baptismal Record there. His parents may have been Nonconformists." - G
• It would be usefull to put the things he invented into context with one line explaining what they were. While I do have a background in engineering (CS based tho lol) out-flow radial turbine and single and double helical gears are not things I can immediately conjur up mental pictures for and it takes me a while to parse/figure out what they are.
  • I admit I wasn't absolutely sure what some of these are; but I tried my best to elaborate lol. - G
• Sources check out
  • @Sohom Datta: Sorry it took a while! Does this look good? Generalissima (talk) (it/she) 04:01, 1 July 2024 (UTC)