Talk:Jane Manning James/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Carbrera (talk · contribs) 23:09, 30 June 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Infobox

Please removed any unused parameters, like "image size", "birth name", etc....

Lead

"She travelled with her husband to Utah," --> "She traveled with her husband to Utah,"
"She petitioned the First presidency to be endowed and sealed;" --> "She petitioned the first presidency to be endowed and sealed;"

Early life and life with Fitches

"Although late in his life her brother Isaac gave her birthday as 1813,[6] there are source discrepancies that place her birthday anywhere from September 22,1812 to 1820." --> "Although late in his life her brother Isaac gave her birthday as 1813,[6] there are source discrepancies that place her birthday anywhere from September 22, 1812 to the year 1820."
"She was raised by the Fitch's daughter and lived with them for the next thirty years." --> "She was raised by the Fitches' daughter and lived with them for the next thirty years."

Conversion and Relocation to Nauvoo

Change title name as so: "Conversion and Relocation to Nauvoo" --> "Conversion and relocation to Nauvoo"
"In the Fall of 1842," --> "In the fall of 1842,"
"Jane was baptized a member of the Church of Jesus Christ of Latter Day Saints the following Sunday, and acquainted many friends and family members with her new beliefs as well." --> "Jane was baptized by a member of the Church of Jesus Christ of Latter Day Saints the following Sunday, and later acquainted many friends and family members with her new beliefs as well."
"Over the next year her mother and siblings would establish their own homes." --> "Over the next year, her mother and siblings would establish their own homes."

Pioneer life in Utah

"The family's first years in the valley were difficult: they lived in poverty and often didn't even have the barest essentials for survival." --> no source.

Petitions to be Endowed and Sealed; Adoption as a servant in the Smith Family =

Change title name as so: "Petitions to be Endowed and Sealed; Adoption as a servant in the Smith Family" --> "Petitions to be endowed and sealed; adoption as a servant in the Smith Family"
"Isaac Manning left the family in 1869 after selling most of the family's realty to his wife." --> No source.
"She began to petition the First Presidency to be endowed and to be sealed, along with her children, to Walker Lewis, a prominent African-American Mormon Elder." --> "She began to petition the first Presidency to be endowed and to be sealed, along with her children, to Walker Lewis, a prominent African-American Mormon Elder."
"In 1872 she sold the family farm and moved closer to the city in order to save money." --> "In 1872, she sold the family farm and moved closer to the city in order to save money."
"In her later life both she and her brother Isaac J. Manning received reserved seats near the front and center of the Utah Tabernacle for church services.[5]:8" --> "In her later life, both she and her brother Isaac J. Manning received reserved seats near the front and center of the Utah Tabernacle for church services.[5]:8"
"Instead, the First Presidency "decided she might be adopted into the family of Joseph Smith as a servant, which was done, a special ceremony having been prepared for the purpose."[10]" --> Why are all of the 'f's in 'First' capitalized? Am I missing something here

Legacy

"A 20-minute documentary based on James' life, Jane Manning James: Your Sister in the Gospel, premiered in 2005, and has been shown at This Is The Place Heritage Park in Salt Lake City, Utah, the 2005 annual conference of the Foundation for Apologetic Information & Research (FAIR), and on public television (PBS). The film was directed by Margaret Blair Young, co-author with Darius Gray of the Standing on the Promises trilogy of historical fiction that draws on the facts of James' life. Documentary filmmaker Scott Freebairn produced the film." --> All no sources here.
"In June 1999, a monument to James' life was dedicated near James' grave in the Salt Lake City Cemetery by the Genesis Group (an official organization begun under LDS President Joseph Fielding Smith to support Latter-day Saints of African descent) along with the Missouri Mormon Frontier Foundation. The original headstones of Jane and Isaac James were supplemented with a granite monument faced with two bronze plaques. One side of the monument commemorates an incident documented in 1850, by Mormon pioneer Eliza Partridge Lyman, who wrote:" --> All no sources here.

End of GA Review:

ON HOLD for seven days to allow for changes to be made. Thanks and good luck! Cheers, Carbrera (talk) 23:13, 30 June 2016 (UTC).[reply]

Corrections made to Jane Elizabeth Manning James

I have went through the article and made all of the suggested corrections, including adding inline citations where needed. The capitalization in First Presidency was due to the fact that it is a specific leadership group within the Mormon faith and is usually capitalized when discussed (within the faith). However I didn't know what Wikipedia's guidelines for that are, and so put them in lower caps with a link to the "First Presidency" Wikipedia page. Thank you for taking the time to review the article! Alexislynn(BYU) (talk) 21:37, 6 July 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Further corrections to Jane Elizabeth Manning James page

@Carbrera: Just wondering if there are any other corrections that need to be made to this article before it passes the GA review? Thanks again for taking the time to review it! Alexislynn(BYU) (talk) 15:20, 26 July 2016 (UTC)[reply]