Talk:Japanese destroyer Momo (1944)/GA1

GA Review

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Nominator: Sturmvogel 66 (talk · contribs)

Reviewer: Sammi Brie (talk · contribs) 07:50, 24 March 2024 (UTC)

@Sturmvogel 66: Planning to do this one Sunday or soon after. Spot checking will be tough with the offline sources. Is there any way to get access to them for this purpose? Sammi Brie (she/her • t • c) 07:50, 24 March 2024 (UTC)

• I can send you pictures of the relevant pages on Monday.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 08:50, 24 March 2024 (UTC)

  That would be wonderful. I'll probably do the non-sourcing material today. Sammi Brie (she/her • t • c) 16:16, 24 March 2024 (UTC)

GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)
It is reasonably well written. a (prose, spelling, and grammar): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists): It is factually accurate and verifiable. a (references): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR): d (copyvio and plagiarism): It is broad in its coverage. a (major aspects): b (focused): It follows the neutral point of view policy. Fair representation without bias: It is stable. No edit wars, etc.: It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate. a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
Overall: Pass/Fail:
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Copy changes were done, so passing. Sammi Brie (she/her • t • c) 21:48, 26 March 2024 (UTC)

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Copy changes

• She played a minor role in the Battle of Ormoc Bay in early December escorting Add comma after "December"
• GEOCOMMA needed after "Philippines"
• Not concerned about the double-links because of the density of technical terms.
• American air raids deterred the battleships from completing the journey and the ships were diverted to the Spratly Islands WP:CINS comma needed after "journey"
• American forces began landing a few miles south of Ormoc on 7 December and the convoy was spotted by American aircraft that morning CINS comma needed after "December"
• "northward", not "northwards"
• Further attacks that afternoon damaged Ume and Sugi and sank two of the transports while only one was able to beach itself. Add a comma after "transports"
• Momo later return to "returned"
• "afterwards" try "after"
• Momo was hit twice by bombs that started a fire amidships that forced her captain to order her torpedoes be ejected overboard to prevent them from exploding. try Momo was hit twice by bombs that started a fire amidships, forcing her captain to order her torpedoes be ejected overboard to prevent them from exploding.
• two ships, plural
• Comma after "boiler room"

Sourcing and spot checks

What makes the CombinedFleet.com website a reliable source?

• The owners of the website are published experts on the Pacific War. See [1]--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 15:00, 25 March 2024 (UTC)

• 3: Matsu/Tachibana Class Specifications ... Crew: 210 Y
• 7: The Matsu Class, approved in the 1952 Supplementary Programme... Y
• 10: During the morning, VMF-211 F4U [Corsair] fighter-bombers patrolling Ormoc Bay, Leyte, locate and attack seven Japanese ships attempting to land reinforcements. Eight F4Us take on Japanese escort fighters and four F4Us attack the ships. One IJN destroyer is set on fire, and it runs aground. Three VMF-211 F4Us and their pilots are lost. Y
• 12: Most of the information is in Nevitt, but nothing looks out of place in Rohwer. Y

Images

The lone image is PD-Japan with no issues. Encouragement: Add alt text.

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