Talk:Jesus Piece (album)/GA1
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Reviewer: Retrohead (talk · contribs) 11:23, 8 November 2014 (UTC)
- The 'Commercial performance' requires serious research and expansion. If you're unable to find additional information, merge it into some other section. Two sentences can not constitute a section. Try finding second week sales and beyond, as well as international sales.
- Do not mention rating in the prose, because they are already given in the table. Also, avoid stating non-grade rating in the table, because overall descriptions such as "favorable" or "unfavorable" are personal impressions.
- You can paraphrase some if the critics in order to present the reader the full extent of the review, rather than citing a single part. If the quotation is interesting or amusing, it might be better to cite, but in other cases, try paraphrasing.
- Any awards in the 'Accolades'? Grammys, VMAs, or something similar?
- I think that "engineer" and "featured artist" should be omitted from the personnel if you're using Allmusic.
- The box quote seems to jump from nowhere. I don't see how it is related to the album's concept, nor what it additionally says that hasn't been said in the section about discussing Christianity and rap music.
- There are quite of YouTube links used here, which shouldn't be featured in a GA. Those need to be replaced.
- There is inconsistency with the reference formatting. For example, HipHopDX is variously placed in a "work" and "publisher" template.
- Non-reviewer comment: Three dead links need to be addressed Snuggums (talk / edits) 23:21, 9 November 2014 (UTC)
- That inconsistency your talking about is because some of these sources are independent.
- There are some GAs that don't omit the two credits you mentioned from the personnel when using AllMusic. DepressedPer (talk) 14:09, 10 November 2014 (UTC)
- I'm glad you've accepted to cooperate on this one DepressedPer. According to WP:MOS-ALBUM#Personnel, if citing from Allmusic, do not include "composer" credits (not engineer). Also the commercial performance desperately needs expanding. I can not pass the article with such omission.--Retrohead (talk) 18:19, 10 November 2014 (UTC)
- I got rid of the credits you mentioned in Personnel and expanded Commercial performance but I couldn't find international sales for it. DepressedPer (talk) 03:25, 11 November 2014
- Failed—Sorry, but there are too many copyediting aberrations and dead links that require more time to deal with. Appreciate all your help so far DepressedPer, but I can not pass the article in its current state.--Retrohead (talk) 00:29, 16 November 2014 (UTC)