Talk:John B. Magruder/GA2

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Reviewer: AustralianRupert (talk · contribs) 03:16, 22 November 2018 (UTC)[reply]


I will take a look at this article. Regards, AustralianRupert (talk) 03:16, 22 November 2018 (UTC)[reply]

General comments/suggestions: G'day, Money emoji, nice work. I have a few suggestions/comments: AustralianRupert (talk) 03:20, 22 November 2018 (UTC)[reply]

  • the infobox says his date of death was "February 19", but the lead and body of the article says "February 18"
  • in the lead recapturing Galveston, Texas the following year --> the year that this followed doesn't seem to have been defined.
  • link furlough
  • They had three children; Isabella (1833 – July 20, 1869); Katherine (1836 – April 26, 1896) Elizabeth; and Henry R. (1841 – January 31, 1907): there appears to be four names here?
  • Fixed, that was the result of a misplaced word. Kges1901 (talk) 18:57, 25 November 2018 (UTC)[reply]
  • found the circumstances favoring --> "found the circumstances favorable"?
  • suffered a humiliating defeat: I suggest avoiding the word "humiliating" as it might convey a point of view. Probably best to just to say he was defeated
  • army–the Army of the Potomac–to disembark...: the dashes here should probably be emdashes, not endashes
  • Peninsula–about 13,600 men–was tasked...: same as above
  • Done by Kges.
  • The objectives of Lee–by assuming the offensive–was to : same as above
  • In Paul Octave Hébert, Magruder's predecessor's, tenure Galveston, Texas: this seems a little awkwardly worded. Perhaps this might work: "Magruder's predecessor, Paul Octave Hebert, surrendered Galveston, Texas, on October 9..."?
  • "The third-ranking..." --> "The third highest ranking"?
Changed.💵Money💵emoji💵💸 19:24, 25 November 2018 (UTC)[reply]
  • ext links all work, no dab or dup links (no action required)
  • "File:John B Magruder.jpg": needs a US licence
  • the portal link should probably be placed at the top of the section it is currently displayed in
    Done💵Money💵emoji💵💸 19:32, 25 November 2018 (UTC)[reply]
  • on the talk page of the article, there is a query about the date of birth: "Douglas Southall Freeman says that Magruder was born at Winchester, Virginia, on August 15 1810..." I wonder if this discrepancy should be discussed in a note, or in some other fashion? AustralianRupert (talk) 03:24, 22 November 2018 (UTC)[reply]
  • It looks like all of the concerns have been covered. AustralianRupert Think its passed? (Thanks for reviewing this btw)💵Money💵emoji💵💸 22:55, 25 November 2018 (UTC)[reply]
    • G'day, Money and Kges, yes those changes look good to me. I made a further minor tweak, as I realised I'd failed to mention a minor grammar issue. Thanks for your efforts. Regards, AustralianRupert (talk) 02:33, 26 November 2018 (UTC)[reply]

Criteria

  • It is reasonably well written.
    a (prose): b (MoS):
  • It is factually accurate and verifiable.
    a (references): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):
  • It is broad in its coverage.
    a (major aspects): b (focused):
  • It is stable.
    No edit wars etc.:
  • It contains images, where possible, to illustrate the topic.
    a (tagged and captioned): b (Is illustrated with appropriate images): c (non-free images have fair use rationales): d public domain pictures appropriately demonstrate why they are public domain:
  • Overall:
    a Pass/Fail:
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