Talk:John Vanbiesbrouck/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: KnowIG (talk) 22:42, 20 March 2011 (UTC)[reply]

GA review (see here for criteria)

It is reasonably well written.
a (prose): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
Lead is too detailed. Particually second paragraph

Shortened lead. Could cut it back more if needed.

It is factually accurate and verifiable.
a (references): b (citations to reliable sources): {{GAList/check|aye} c (OR):
What makes go.com reliable

Go.com is actually ESPN.com the site address is espn.go.com. this was an existing reference that i didn't look closely enough at to realize what it was listed as. I have changed it to reflect ESPN

It is broad in its coverage.
a (major aspects): b (focused):
It follows the neutral point of view policy.
Fair representation without bias:
It is stable.
No edit wars, etc.:
It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.
a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
see below.
Overall:
Pass/Fail:

Gormless t*** photo in the infobox is there a nicer one out there

No, this was the only free image I could find.

Personal section needs to be split into early life and outside of hockey. Reason the first bit of the career section makes not much sense without an early life section.

I recently found a book at the library with a bit more about his younger years so I'll try to add that and split up the personal life section later tomorrow.

Split but there wasn't much I could add to that section.

I'll give it a read and probably come up with some CE tomorrow. KnowIG (talk) 22:56, 20 March 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Probably only a handfull of things to mention tomorrow reads well. Reference all awards and achievement though KnowIG (talk) 23:58, 20 March 2011 (UTC)[reply]

The unreferenced awards and achievements are mentioned in the prose but I can add another reference in the section itself.

Added reference for all the awards and achievements.

Thanks for the review and I'll address the concerns, probably tomorrow.--Mo Rock...Monstrous (leech44) 04:13, 21 March 2011 (UTC)[reply]

I've think I have addressed all of the above concerns.--Mo Rock...Monstrous (leech44) 01:56, 22 March 2011 (UTC)[reply]

I added in a reference concering the teams record when he was head coach. It only goes upto February but gives the reader an idea of his record before the Trevor incident. A couple of little copy edits and this is now good to pass. KnowIG (talk) 08:51, 22 March 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Thank you for that and again for the review. Cheers--Mo Rock...Monstrous (leech44) 13:10, 22 March 2011 (UTC)[reply]