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Reviewer: 12george1 (talk) 05:04, 4 March 2011 (UTC)[reply]

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  • "...Jakarta, Indonesia which according to Allmusic was one of the first heavy metal bands from Indonesia to make international inroads." - Try reading this phrase; wouldn't it read better if you added a comma after "Indonesia" and "Allmusic"? --Done.--3family6 (talk) 14:52, 4 March 2011 (UTC)[reply]
  • "Through its career, the band has released 7 full length studio albums, 2 compilation albums, 2 demo tapes..." - All numbers less than 10 should be spelled-out (exceptions: if the number has to appear that way, such as the album "8"; or dates, such as January 1) --Done.--3family6 (talk) 14:52, 4 March 2011 (UTC)[reply]
Early years (formation to 2002)
International scene (2003-2006)
Jeff's move to Canada (2006-2007)
Departure of band members (2009)
Style
  • Move the audio clip of "Our Urban Industry Runs Monotonously" to the top of the section, and not in a random spot within the text, because this part of the following sentence: "The band’s well received fifth album, Acidity, mixed black metal and double bass drum blasts with progressive metal, progressive rock," and the other part: "classic rock, jazz, and ambient styles which led to the band being labeled “avant-garde,..." look like there on two separate paragraphs. --Done.--3family6 (talk) 14:52, 4 March 2011 (UTC)[reply]
  • Delink: "1000 Thoughts of Violence", "progressive metal", and "The Habit of Fire" --Done.--3family6 (talk) 14:52, 4 March 2011 (UTC)[reply]
Songwriting and recording techniques
Kekal and DIY ethic
Former members
Guest musicians
Discography
References
Summary
Good job on improving the article, I will now be passing it for GA. Congratulations, --12george1 (talk) 15:52, 4 March 2011 (UTC)[reply]