Talk:Kenneth Walker (general)/GA1

GA Review[edit]

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Initial Comment[edit]

I will be reviewing this article in the next day or two. MarquisCostello (talk) 15:32, 8 March 2009 (UTC)[reply]

GA Review[edit]

An overview:

well written =Y accuracy =Y thorough =Y NPOV =Y stable =Y images =Y

Some section specefic comments:

Lead[edit]

Several points in the lead could do with citation. These include "He was also a forceful advocate of the efficacy of strategic bombardment" and "The plan called for the creation of an enormous air force to beat Germany through strategic bombardment".

Done Hawkeye7 (talk) 21:24, 8 March 2009 (UTC)[reply]

*"Walker was one of four officers in the Air War Plans Division, which was tasked with developing a production requirements plan for the air war."

Done Hawkeye7 (talk) 21:24, 8 March 2009 (UTC)[reply]

~~:For clarity, i would make this "Walker was one of four officers in the Air War Plans Division, which was tasked with developing a production requirements plan for the war in the air."~~

Done Hawkeye7 (talk) 21:24, 8 March 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Education and early life[edit]

This section seems to be fine.

Military Career[edit]

World War One[edit]

"Walker enlisted at Denver, Colorado on 15 December 1917 and took his flying training at the University of California's School of Military Aeronautics and at Mather Field."

~~It might be good to explain what/where Mather Field was rather than assuming the reader knows this.~~

Done I had sort of expected that they would click on the link. Hawkeye7 (talk) 20:29, 8 March 2009 (UTC)[reply]

~~The above point applies to the rest of this mini-section- mayb stating in which state these various training areas are would be helpful.~~

Done Hawkeye7 (talk) 21:24, 8 March 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Between the World Wars[edit]

"While stationed at Post Field, Walker met Marguerite Potter, a sociology graduate of the University of Oklahoma at the Norman campus. The two were married in September 1922."

~~This would benefit from a citation.~~

Done It had one. Moved it closer. Hawkeye7 (talk) 20:21, 8 March 2009 (UTC)[reply]

World War Two[edit]

"In mid-September 1942, at the height of the Kokoda Track campaign"

~~Do you have a wikilink for the Kokoda Track Campaign?~~

Done Yes. Hawkeye7 (talk) 20:21, 8 March 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Legacy[edit]

This section seems fine.

General Comments[edit]

This article was a pleasure to read and review, and i could find very few things wrong with it. I have put the article on hold while you have a look at my comments. Please leave a message here or on my talk page when you have had a look at my comments. It would be good if you could strike through or check mark each point as you address it. Regards, MarquisCostello (talk) 16:58, 8 March 2009 (UTC)[reply]

I have check marked everything, leaving it to you to strike them when you are satisfied. Hawkeye7 (talk) 21:29, 8 March 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Final Comment[edit]

A good article that really only needed tweaking. Thanks for making those changes. Have passed for GA. Regards, MarquisCostello (talk) 22:41, 8 March 2009 (UTC)[reply]