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Your page looks great and is so organized! There is not much I would change, but I suggest adding the first names of the two men into the first section, maybe in the second sentence when you say they were able to monopolize. Also, you may have thought about this already, If you make there names in the biographical section links to the wiki pages specifically about them it may be helpful for researchers. Great Job! Elephants394 (talk) 00:52, 1 December 2014 (UTC)[reply]

Significant amount of information! One recommendation I have is to break up the biographical information of each and the partnership description. It seems a bit disoriented. Another recommendation is to incorporate a little bit more information about Klaw and Erlanger in relation to The Shubert Family and The New Amsterdam Theater. I would also suggest adding a conclusion and describing a bit more in detail how and why pressure from the Shubert family and accusations of trust building forced the Syndicate to dissolve. Overall, looks great! — Preceding unsigned comment added by Courtpm21 (talkcontribs)