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[edit]For example in § Others, prose is lacking cohesion. For example, instead of Khilwat Khana was built by introduce it first. For cohesion and better paraphrasing try joining Khilwat Khana with Kala Burj. For example, Khilwat Khana was built by Shah Jahan in 1633 located north of the Paen Bagh. The plinth and door frames of it are made of marble with a curvilinear roof. In the northwest from Khilwat Khana lies a watch tower called Kala Burj..... It would be good should information about royal bath, ladies park, khawabgah, museum and galleries etc be added. sami talk 19:43, 7 May 2015 (UTC)
- @Samee: I have added, please check. RRD13 দেবজ্যোতি (talk) 07:24, 12 May 2015 (UTC)
- The article has been significantly changed. I'm assessing the article. I'd ping you once done. -- sami talk 23:42, 12 May 2015 (UTC)
- @Samee: I have added, please check. RRD13 দেবজ্যোতি (talk) 07:24, 12 May 2015 (UTC)
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[edit]@Royroydeb: This is a partial list and being published so that meanwhile the nominator may improve the article. This list is now complete. You may use either {{done}} if executed or use {{comment}} to comment followed by your signatures.
- 1 Origins of the fort extend far into antiquity, but the existing base structure was built during the reign of Mughal Emperor Akbar between 1556–1605 and was regularly upgraded by subsequent Mughal, Sikh and British rulers.
CONSIDER: Origins of the fort extend far into antiquity but the existing base structure was built during the reign of Mughal Emperor Akbar between 1556–1605 and was regularly upgraded by subsequent Mughal, Sikh and British rulers.
comma removed
- 2 One is known as Alamgiri Gate built by Emperor Aurangzeb which opens towards Badshahi Mosque and other, older one known as Maseeti (Punjabi language word means Masjid) or Masjidi Gate which opens towards Maseeti Gate Area of Walled City and was built by Emperor Akbar.
CONSIDER: One of the gates built by Emperor Aurangzeb is called Alamgiri gate that opens towards Badshahi mosque and qother older gate built by Emperor Akbar is called Maseeti or Masjidi gate that opens towards Maseeti area of Walled city.
Add footnote for Maseeti: Maseeti is a Punjabi word meaning mosque or masjid.
- 3 Some of the famous sites inside the fort include: Sheesh Mahal, Alamgiri Gate, Naulakha Pavilion, and Moti Masjid.
- 4 The origins of Lahore Fort are obscure and are traditionally based on various myths.
CONSIDER: The origins of Lahore Fort are obscure and traditionally based on various myths. omit are before traditionally
- 5 It is unknown who and when constructed the fort.
CONSIDER: It is unknown when and who constructed the fort.
- 6 The earliest reference about this fort is that in around 1240s, it was destroyed by Mongols.
CONSIDER: The earliest reference about the fort is that in 1240s, it was destroyed by Mongols. omit around
- 7 In around 1399, it was again destroyed, this time by the invading forces of Timur only to be rebuilt again by Sultan Mubark Shah Syed after 20 years.
CONSIDER: It was destroyed again around 1399 by the invading forces of Timur only to be rebuilt by Sultan Mubarak Shah Syed after 20 years.
- 8 He rebuilt the fort with solid bricks and lime and over time "lofty palaces were built to which additional beauty was lent by luxuriant gardens". He added the Doulat Khana-e-Khas-o-Am, Jharoka-e-Darshan , Masjidi Gate among other structures. However the structures built by him "were replaced by subsequent rulers".
CONSIDER: He rebuilt the fort with solid bricks and lime and over time lofty palaces were built to which additional beauty was lent by luxuriant gardens. The other structures built by him included the Doulat Khana-e-Khas-o-Am, Jharoka-e-Darshan, and Masjidi Gate. On the other hand, his structures were replaced by subsequent rulers. Please don't use inverted commas here, instead use italic style
- 9 Akbar's successors made more additions to the fort. Shah Jahan built the Shah Burj and Sheesh Mahal. He also added the Naulakha Pavilion, which is his private quarter. His son Aurangzeb built the entrance, Alamgiri Gate, which is flanked by semi-circular towers with domes pavilions.
CONSIDER: Shah Jahan built the Shah Burj, the Sheesh Mahal and the Naulakha Pavilion. His son Aurangzeb built the entrance, Alamgiri Gate, which is flanked by semi-circular towers with domes pavilions. What is Naulakha Pavilion? Add it under Naulakha’s subsection instead of here
- 10 In 1758, the fort was captured by the Maratha forces under Raghunathrao.
Then the Bhangi Sikh Dynasty (1716–1810), one of the 12 Sikh Kingdoms (Misl) of Punjab ruled Lahore City from 1760s until 1799 and expanded the City of Lahore. When Ranjit Singh, another Sikh chief from the Gujranwala area, took Lahore from the Bhangi Misl the Lahore Fort fell to Ranjit Singh and in 1801 he was crowned as the emperor of all of the Punjab. Lahore Fort and the city from (1799–1849) remained under the control of Maharaja Ranjit Singh, Sher-e-Panjab, and his sons, grandsons, and wives, until the fall of the last Sikh empire or the Lahore Darbar in 1849.
CONSIDER: The fort was captured by the Maratha forces under Raghunathrao in 1758. Then the Bhangi Sikh Dynasty (1716–1810), one of the 12 Sikh Kingdoms of the Punjab ruled the city of Lahore from 1760 until 1799 and expanded the city. When Ranjit Singh, another Sikh chief from the Gujranwala area, took Lahore from the Bhangi Misl the Lahore Fort fell to Ranjit Singh and in 1801 he was crowned as the emperor of all of the Punjab. Lahore Fort and the city from 1799–1849 remained under the control of Maharaja Ranjit Singh and his sons, grandsons, and wives until the fall of the last Sikh empire in 1849. Make one paragraph under Sikh era
- 11 Excavations in 1959 in front of Diwan-i-Am, a gold coin dated 1025AD belonging to Mahmud of Ghazni was found. The coin was unaerthed at a depth of 25 feet (7.6 m) from the lawn. Besides, "cultural layers continued to a further depth of 15 feet (4.6 m)" which indicates that the fort was inhabited by people even before the conquest by him.
CONSIDER: Excavations in 1959 in front of Diwan-i-Am led to the discovery of a gold coin dated 1025 AD belonging to Mahmud of Ghazvani. The coin was unearthed at the depth of 25 feet from the lawn. The cultural layers were continuous to the depth of 15 feet indicating that the fort was inhabited by people even before his conquest. correct spellings of unearthed
- 12 While relaying the deteriorated floor of Akbari Gate in April 2007, three floors in the fort were unearthed, belonging to the British, Sikh and Mughal period. The British period floor is constructed of bricks, the Sikh period of burnt bricks and pebbles were used in making the floor belonging to the Mughal era, a trademark of Mughal era. The Mughal floor was either built during Jahangir or Shah Jahan's rule.
CONSIDER: While relaying the deteriorated floor of Akbari Gate in April 2007, three floors in the fort were unearthed belonging to the British, Sikh and Mughal period. The floor of the British, Sikh and Mughal periods were constructed with bricks, burnt bricks and pebbles respectively. The latter either built during Jahangir’s or Shah Jahan’s era was the hallmark of Mughals.
- 13 In April 2006, it was reported that officials had urged UNESCO to remove the name of the fort from the list of endangered World Heritage Sites. This is because of extensive restoration work done of $ 9 million funded by Norway, Hong Kong, United Kingdom and France.
CONSIDER: : In April 2006, it was reported that officials had urged UNESCO to remove the name of the fort from the list of endangered World Heritage Sites because of extensive restoration work funded by Norway, Hong Kong, the United Kingdom and France.
- 14 Though in 1990, UNESCO had ordered the Punjab Archaeological Department not to use "the Fort for state or private functions because" of its historical importance. However in 23 December 2010, a wedding reception was held at the fort. Also in the next month, in the Deewan-i-Khas a dinner was held which violated the Antiquities Act of 1975 as it was expected that the building could be damaged during such an activity.
CONSIDER: Though in 1990, UNESCO had ordered the Punjab Archaeological Department to bar the use of the Fort for state or private functions on account of historical significance, a wedding reception was held in violation on December 23, 2010. The Antiquities Act of 1975, which prohibits the use of historical places to protect them from damage, was violated in the following month by hosting a dinner in the Diwan-i-Khas
- 15 In April 2013 an exhibition of Sikh artifacts took place at the fort premises. It was titled "Glorious Sikh Heritage under One Roof". Rare artifacts belonging to Ranjit Singh's reign, agreement documents between British and the Sikh, weapons are jewellery were amongst the exhibits.
CONSIDER: In April 2013 an exhibition of Sikh artefacts took place at the fort premises. It was titled Glorious Sikh Heritage under One Roof. Rare artefacts belonging to Ranjit Singh's reign, agreement documents between the British and the Sikh, weapons, and jewellery were amongst the exhibits. replace artifacts with artefacts and remove inverted commas
- @Samee: Have a look! RRD13 দেবজ্যোতি (talk) 10:58, 14 May 2015 (UTC)
- Royroydeb I shall get back to you soon. sami talk 09:50, 15 May 2015 (UTC)
- @Samee: Have a look! RRD13 দেবজ্যোতি (talk) 10:58, 14 May 2015 (UTC)
- 16 In 1980, Pakistani government nominated the fort for inclusion in UNESCO World Heritage Site based on the 1, 2 and 3 no criteria along with the Shalimar. In the fifth meeting session of the World Heritage Site committee, held at Sydney, Australia in October 1981, it was announced that both of the monuments were added to the list. However in 2000, Pakistan sent a letter to the organization to include both the sites in List of World Heritage in Danger and also asked for their help to "restore the damaged part of the outer walls and hydraulic works of Shalamar Gardens". It was later included in the said list. In June 2012, after years of extensive renovation and restoration work, they were removed from the list.
CONSIDER: In 1980, Government of Pakistan nominated the fort for inclusion in UNESCO World Heritage Site based on the criteria i, ii, and iii together with the Shalimar. In the fifth meeting session held in Sydney in October 1981, the World Heritage Site committee added both the monuments to the list. However in 2000, Pakistan sent a letter to the organization to include both the sites in List of World Heritage in Danger and sought help to restore the damaged part of the outer walls and hydraulic works of Shalamar Gardens. After years of extensive renovation and restoration work, they were removed from the list in June 2012.
Done @Samee: RRD13 দেবজ্যোতি (talk) 08:44, 20 May 2015 (UTC)
- Royroydeb Sorry for delay but I am putting this review on hold for at least two days due to lack of internet connectivity. sami talk 08:44, 22 May 2015 (UTC)
- @Samee:, I have edited the article as you have said, (I dont know why you have put the pending symbols). RRD13 দেবজ্যোতি (talk) 09:52, 22 May 2015 (UTC)
- @Royroydeb: Those pending symbols have not been placed now. I will remove them after thoroughly reviewing once all emendations are done. The list is complete now.
- @Samee:, I have edited the article as you have said, (I dont know why you have put the pending symbols). RRD13 দেবজ্যোতি (talk) 09:52, 22 May 2015 (UTC)
- Royroydeb Sorry for delay but I am putting this review on hold for at least two days due to lack of internet connectivity. sami talk 08:44, 22 May 2015 (UTC)
- 17 The strategic location of Lahore city between the Mughal territories and the strongholds of Kabul, Multan, and Kashmir required the dismantling of the old mud-fort and fortification with solid brick masonry.
CONSIDER:replacing required with necessitated
- 18 The fort is clearly divided into two sections: first the administrative section, which is well connected with main entrances, and comprises larger garden areas and Diwan-e-khas for royal audiences. The second - a private and concealed residential section - is divided into courts in the northern part, accessible through 'elephant gate'
CONSIDER:remove clearly; replace comprises larger garden areas with includes garden; replace The second - a private and concealed residential section - is divided into courts in the northern part, accessible through 'elephant gate' with The second, a private and concealed residential section is divided into courts in the north and accessible through elephant gate.
- 19 It also contains Shish Mahal (Hall of Mirrors of Mirror Palace), and spacious bedrooms and smaller gardens.
CONSIDER: It also contains Sheesh Mahal, spacious bedrooms and small gardens.
- 20 On the outside, the walls are decorated with blue Persian kashi tiles. The original entrance faces the Maryam Zamani Mosque, whereas the larger Alamgiri Gate opens to the Hazuri Bagh through to the majestic Badshahi Mosque.
CONSIDER: The exterior walls are decorated with blue Persian Kashi tiles. The original entrance faces the Maryam Zamani mosque and the larger Alamgiri gate opens towards Hazuri Bagh through the majestic Badshahi mosque.
- 21 The Diwan-i-Aam (the Hall of Public Audience) was added to the fort by Shah Jahan in 1628. In this hall, the king used to meet with the common people. Its plan is similar to the Diwan-i-Aam at the Agra Fort. The hall has forty pillars and was built in front of a jharoka or balcony. The hall was destroyed as Sikh ruler Sher Singh bombarded the fort in his fight against Chand Kaur. It was later reconstructed by the British in 1849.
CONSIDER: The Diwan-i-Aam was the Hall of commons. It was built by Shah Jahan in 1628. The kings regularly had meetings with the common people in this hall. Its design is similar to the Diwan-i-Aam at the Agra Fort. The hall has forty pillars and was built in front of a balcony. It was destroyed when a Sikh ruler Sher Singh bombarded the fort in his fight against Maharani Chand Kaur, the wife of Mahraja Kharak Singh. It was later restored by the British in 1849.
- 22 The Sheesh Mahal was built by Mirza Ghiyas Begh (father of Mumtaz Mahal) in around 1631 during the rule of Mughal ruler Shah Jahan. It consists of a "spacious hall" with several halls behind. This was the harem of the fort. There is a marble perforated screen in the rear chamber which is carved of "tendril, floral and geometrical patterns." Pietra dura work can be seen on the walls of it.
CONSIDER: The Sheesh Mahal is the palace of mirrors and was built by Mirza Ghiyas Begh, the father of Mumtaz Mahal around 1631 during the rule of Shah Jahan. It consists of a spacious hall with several halls behind. This was the harem of the fort. There is a marble perforated screen in the rear chamber which is carved of tendril, floral and geometrical patterns. Pietra dura work can be seen on its walls.
- 23 It is a quadrangle consisting of royal ladies quarters and harem. Its construction was commenced by Akbar and was ended by Jahangir in 1618. The buildings here were constrcuted over subterranean chambers especially those in the northern, western and eastern borders. The iwans present here are a typical representation of architecture under Akbar reign. The quadrangle measures 372 metres (1,220 ft) x 245 metres (804 ft). The quadrangle has a garden called chahar bagh, flanked by walkways, a hauz (tank) besides fountains. During the British period the quadrangle was modified to accomodate the officers, thus altering it according to requirements of the army.
CONSIDER: It is a quadrangle consisting of royal ladies quarters and harem. Its construction was started by Akbar and was ended by Jahangir in 1618. The buildings were constructed over subterranean chambers especially those in the northern, western and eastern borders. Its iwans typically represents the architecture during Akbar reign. The quadrangle measures 372 x 245 metres. The quadrangle has a garden called Chahar Bagh bordered by walkways and fountains. During the British period the quadrangle was modified to accommodate the officers according to requirements of the army.
- 24 Khwabgah was the sleeping house of Shah Jahan. It was built by the mentioned ruler under the supervision of Wazir Khan. It is the first Shah Jahani building in the fort, which he built in 1634 during his first visit to the city. Currently the structure no longer has the decorations except for a "trace of the marble which might once have beautified the facade"
CONSIDER: Khwabgah was the bedroom of Shah Jahan. It was built by Shah Jahan under the supervision of Wazir Khan in 1634 during his first visit to the city. It is the first building built by Shah Jahan in the fort. At present its decorations have vanished except for a trace of the marble which once might have beautified the façade.
- 25 The pavilion was built during the reign of Shah Jahan for a cost of 9 lakh rupees. Situated in the west of Sheesh Mahal, the pavilion is rectangular in shape, and is prominent because of its centrally arched and extraordinarily curved roof which is a unique feature is symbolic of Shajahani architecture. It reflects a mixture of contemporary traditions at the time of its construction of sloping-roof from Bengal, and Baldachin from Europe which demonstrates the imperial as well as religious image of the pavilion. The marble screens of the pavilion are crowned with merlons to prevent inmates being seen from the grounds in between the Fort and the river.
CONSIDER: The pavilion was built during the reign of Shah Jahan for a cost of 9 lakh rupees. Situated in the west of Sheesh Mahal, the pavilion is rectangular in shape and prominent owing to its centrally arched and extraordinarily curved roof representing the unique feature of architecture during Shah Jahan reign. It reflects a mixture of contemporary traditions at the time of its construction of sloping-roof from Bengal and Baldachin from Europe, which makes evident the imperial as well as religious image of the pavilion. The marble shades of the pavilion are capped with merlons to hide view from the grounds.
- 26 Moti Masjid, or Pearl Mosque is a 17th-century mosque inside the fort built during the reign of Shah Jahan. It is constructed of white marble brought from Makrana. The facade is "composed of cusped arches and engaged baluster columns" which has smooth and fine contours. It also has three domes, a raised central pishtaq and two aisles of five bays. Unlike other contemporary mosques, which has three arches, this mosque has fove arches in the facade. During the rule of Maharaja Ranjit Singh, it was forcibly converted into a Sikh temple and was called Moti Mandir.
CONSIDER: Moti Masjid is a 17th-century mosque built inside the fort during the reign of Shah Jahan. It is constructed of white marble brought from Makrana. The facade is composed of cusped arches and engaged baluster columns, which has smooth and fine contours. It has three domes, a raised central pishtaq and two aisles of five bays. Unlike other contemporary mosques, which have three arches, this mosque has five arches in the facade. During the rule of Maharaja Ranjit Singh, it was forcibly converted into a Sikh temple called Moti Mandir.
- 27 Akbari Gate was built by Mughal emperor Akbar in 1566. It however was later called as Masti. One of Akbar's wife built a mosque outside the gate in around 1614. There were two gates built by him. The second one was replaced later by the Alamgiri gate. The Alamgiri Gate is the entrance of the fort. It was built by Mughal emperor Aurangzeb in 1674. It has two semi-circular bastions where lotus petal design adorn at the base of it.
CONSIDER: Mughal Emperor Akbar built two gates. Akbari Gate was built in 1566 and now called Masti Gate. One of Akbar's wives built a mosque outside the gate around 1614. The other gate was replaced later by the Alamgiri Gate. The Alamgiri Gate is the entrance of the fort. It was built by Mughal emperor Aurangzeb in 1674. It has two semi-circular bastions where lotus petal design adorns at the base of it.
- 28 The Naag temple is a Sikh temple near Sheesh Mahal, built during the reign of Maharaja Ranjit Singh by Chand Kaur who was the wife of Kharak Singh. The temple is "square in plan" and is built on a raised platform and its exterior walls are covered with fresco paintings. The temple also has a water-melon shaped dome. As of September 2011, it is a no-go area for the public, as officials apprehend that they could vandalize it by writing on the walls. Also more security staffs would be required which the government was unable to provide.
CONSIDER: The Naag temple is a Sikh temple built by Chand Kaur, the wife of Kharak Singh who was the son of the then ruling Maharaja Ranjit Singh. The temple is square in plan and built on a raised platform. Its exterior walls are covered with fresco paintings. The temple also has a water-melon shaped dome. As of September 2011, it is a no-go area for the public as officials consider that they can vandalize it by graffiti. It also required more security, which the government was unable to afford.
- 29 This is a haveli (house) of unknown origins. It is believed to be a Mughal structure but it is attributed to Mai Jindan i.e. Chand Kaur because of the large scale additions by the Sikhs. It is a two storied building where she is alleged to be murdered. Currently, it is a musuem.
CONSIDER: Mai Jindan Haveli is of unknown origins and believed to be a Mughal structure but attributed to the Mai Jindan, Chand Kaur because of the extensive additions by the Sikhs. It is a two storied building where she is alleged to be murdered. Presently this building serves as a museum.
- 30 This was the haveli of Kharak Singh, the heir to Ranjit Singh. It is located in the southeastern part of the Jahangir's Quadrangle. It was later occupied by the British where the first and the ground floor was used as a 'Commandant's Quarters' and 'Godown and servants house" repectively. Currently it houses the archaeological survey office.
CONSIDER: Kharak Singh Haveli was the haveli of Kharak Singh, the heir to Ranjit Singh. It lies in the south-east of the Jahangir's Quadrangle. It was later occupied by the British where the first and the ground floor were used as a Commandant's Quarters and godown and servants house respectively. Currently it houses the archaeological survey office.
- 31 Khilwat Khana was built by Shah Jahan in 1633 located north of the Paen Bagh. It was the residence of the royal ladies of the court. The plinth and door frames of it are made of marble with a curvilinear roof. Kala Burj is a watch tower. It is located in the northwest from Khilwat Khana.This was used as a summer pavilion. The topmost storey was built during the British era which was "used as bar". Its eave is interlocked with brick work. Maktib Khana was constructed during the reign of Mughal emperor Jahangir. It was used as the entrance gate to the fort by the clerks. It was built under the supervision of Mamur Khan. Besides, the fort also houses separate hammams (bath tubs) for royal men and women.
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[edit]- Under Sikh buildings, remove the § of Naag temple, Mai Jindan haveli, and Kharak Singh haveli and merge them under Sikh buildings. Then there would be two paragraphs under Sikh buildings first one related to Naag temple and the second one related to two havelis.
- Cut short See Also section to just two. I would suggest List of forts in Pakistan and List of UNESCO World Heritage Sites in Pakistan.
- Add footnotes for Moti masjid stating it means Pearl mosque and Sheesh mahal meaning Hall of mirrors.
@Samee: Done the remaining edits. RRD13 দেবজ্যোতি (talk) 17:21, 25 May 2015 (UTC)
- Thank you Royroydeb.
Some suggested edits still need your attention and have been tagged withsami talk 03:54, 26 May 2015 (UTC).
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