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GA Review

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Looking good, with just a few suggestions:

  • Unbold quotes around episode title.
  • Dwight Schrute (Rainn Wilson) decides to compete against the Web site -- use "website" to keep consistency.
  • When it is his turn to appear at the party via webcam -- maybe make it clear here that this is the main Dunder Mifflin party, not the Scranton party.
Okay, how about now? --Mr.crabby ''''' (Talk) 18:32, 2 August 2008 (UTC)[reply]
  • Eventually Michael has an epiphany about the fact that he's committed a crime -- how about "Eventually Michael has an epiphany, realizing that he has committed a crime"?
Changed --Mr.crabby ''''' (Talk) 18:32, 2 August 2008 (UTC)[reply]
  • She doesn't answer, but stifles a smile -- "does not".
Changed --Mr.crabby ''''' (Talk) 18:32, 2 August 2008 (UTC)[reply]
  • According to Jennifer Celotta, the idea for the intro scene came -- firstly, "intro" isn't really an encyclopedic word, and secondly, readers who haven't seen the episode have no idea what happens in the scene. Maybe give a brief description.
Changed --Mr.crabby ''''' (Talk) 18:32, 2 August 2008 (UTC)[reply]
  • were arguing about whether it will ever hit the corner -- "whether it would".
Changed --Mr.crabby ''''' (Talk) 18:32, 2 August 2008 (UTC)[reply]
Linked --Mr.crabby ''''' (Talk) 18:32, 2 August 2008 (UTC)[reply]
Done --Mr.crabby ''''' (Talk) 18:32, 2 August 2008 (UTC)[reply]
  • a 8% Share -- "an".
Fixed --Mr.crabby ''''' (Talk) 18:32, 2 August 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Otherwise, I think we're all good. You've got seven days to make changes, so good luck! —97198 talk 02:19, 2 August 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Everything's good; the only issue still standing is the bold quotation marks (I couldn't find that in writing anywhere but it's definitely a rule of thumb I'm aware of) but I'll fix that myself in a minute, right after I pass the article :) —97198 talk 07:52, 3 August 2008 (UTC)[reply]